Number 1
I feel dull
toneless
no symphony
lingers
in my psyche.
My heart beats flat
where it used throb
in canorous measure
and reverberate
the melodic swirls
of my psychedelic soul.
A cacophony
of soundless screams
echo
in the emptiness.
Monotone
drumming
thuds
within my senseless ears.
I am soundless
listless
muffled by despair.
Not even
the faintest whisper
finds breath
in my silence.
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Number 2
I feel dull
toneless
shades no longer
linger
in my psyche.
My eyes gather no light
where they used to prism
paint
and gather the iridescent swirls
of my psychedelic soul.
Vivid memories
of endless hues
reflect
in the emptiness.
Monochromatic
shadows
ghost
across my vision.
I am colorblind
somnolent
hazy.
Not even
the faintest tint
finds luminescence
in my eyes.
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Number 3
I feel dull
lifeless
warmth no longer
lingers
on my skin.
My fingertips feel no sensation
where they used to perceive
passion
and loiter
on the silky folds of life
fire and ice
Velcro and velvet
rain and sand
devoured.
by my touch.
Satin
memories
fray away.
I am anesthetized
numb
insensate.
Not even
the faintest breeze
of awareness
caresses me.
Patricia Gibson-Williams
Author notes
I hope I didn't break a rule, but I had actually started this series before I saw your contest. I just loved the picture and it seemed to echo the feelings I was attempting to express. I've been focusing on it for thinking this is what she's feeling. I think I want to do one more in the series, but I'm not sure if it would be over kill.
Patti
(option number 4)
Written November 12th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Untitled: A picture contest by sappho87.
400 points, ended December 3, 2005, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I really like the third poem best.
It seems to fit best with the picture, and was also the best written, I feel. Or it appealed most to me.
Anyway, I like the third poem most.
Thanks for the entry, and for following the rules.
Great job and good luck in the contest. -
wow!
excellent series of poems.
i love how they go together but would still work alone.
awesome imagery and spiffy words
great job and good luck -
Good job
I like it the way you've written it. It goes well with the picture. Good job. Shancy. -
i like them the weird thing is they all run together its great
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I want to clarify that these were written as 3 separate poems, they are a series, but was each meant to stand alone.
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This poem is diffrent i like it its not the same thing you read over and over again.
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