she loved him so much
she never wanted to lose him
allways wanted him is her life
till that one night
the night she caught him
in bed with her best friend
well who she thought was her friend
well she ran out of the room crying
and into the kitchen
and got a big knife
put it to her chest
and started to push
it in deep
but he walks in and catches her
tells her he made a big mistake
and that he reallly loved her
and that was the biggest mistake
he ever made
and not to do this
but she didn't believe him and
pushed the knife as deep as it would go
she falls on the cold floor
and that's where she lives her last minutes
she never knew how much he loved her
and never knew that really was a mistake
he leans down
kisses her cold pale lips one last time
takes the knife from her hand
and stabs himself in the chest
and falls to the floor
with her cradled in his arms for the last time
when the friend walked in and saw them
she strted to cry cuz she knew this was all her fault
and if she had never done that
thewey would both still be alive
Author notes
Written November 12th, 2005
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Wow. I don't think that there are actual words that describe this empotion that I am feeling. This is so sad but it is also so true. I love the bit where he kisses her for the last time. I was this close to crying and i'm in the middle of my mates computing class.And they are all guys. :-0 oh well this is a blody awsome poem. I didn't want the friend to kill herself because she should have lived her life with the guilt of the other two's deaths. Permently on her mind. I know I am an evil bitch. I think that the girl shouldn't have done that because they could have sorted it out first but she did it anyway. If there was a gap between her catching the two and killing herself that would have made it more romantic. Anyway don't listen to a word I say. great write -
hey..this is a pretty good poem..but it's kinda crazy..
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wow i love this poem it was a really sad write but i loved it this was full of so much emotion keep it up love u girl
~*!Heather!*~
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