I take this pill, and say goodbye.
My last breath was filled with cries.
Dont be sad, I was already dead,
your gun to my head was my suicide.
I bleed to death, and choke on tears,
dwelling images of wasted years.
Dont be sad, I was already dead,
The words you said were my biggest fears.
I dive off the edge, nowhere to be found,
my bones break in half when i hit the ground,
Dont be sad, I was already dead.
You love in my heart was the silent sound.
I jump in the waves, I enhale the water.
The concience in your head, the forgotten daughter.
Dont be sad, I was already dead,
When you let me go my heart was slaughtered.
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Written November 12th, 2005
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what a sadness that is contrusted in this piece, it certainy captures and holds the attention !
Especially, this particular stanza!
"I bleed to death, and choke on tears,
dwelling images of wasted years.
Dont be sad, I was already dead,
The words you said were my biggest fears."
Your title is fitting well as the selective background.
bless
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well i'm glad you don't feel that way, that makes me happy. stay that way k? k. and a hint of advice, writing about the past shows that you still relive the past in your mind, maybe it's time to let it go. Idk, hope life is treain ya alrite
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haha....thanks. Im actually not feeling this way......i used too, and its the only way i know how yo write poetry. I just wrote two new ones and they are SO cool
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~gosh, i am so jealous...i wish i could write like that...aparently the best thing i have posted wasnt even intended for anyone to read. the i smile one...yeah that sux, very nice poem...still jealous. lol is there a particular something behind this story?!?
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awww....sad even though i already read it before....you are so talented....i seem to have a bit of writer's block
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this is a very sad poem, and really hit me hard bc of something going on in my life rite now. don't give up on life, there are people who care about you. People who love you and will be torn if you are gone. things get better with time. stay strong.
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