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New Spiritual Life

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New Spiritual Life

 

I The Old Gods

 

The old Gods are dusty.
In their niches and corners
They glower, impotent,
Until someone declutters 
And takes them down
To the auction room
Or the car boot sale
To see if they are worth anything.

 

There is no longer mystery
In their familiar wooden faces.
When the light is turned on
The shadows retreat into cupboards
And under the beds with the dust.
How can transcendence come
From a dull wooden figure
That can’t even cure a headache?

 

Take a headache pill like Advil:
Emerald green stained glass,
Glistening in your palm.
On the tongue it is transubstantiated,
A cure you do not need to understand.
There are others, wiser men, who know
The arcana of the laboratory but, for you,
This miracle costs just fifteen cents.

 

II  Consumer Religion

 

Captured by the calendar,
The world rotates.
Each season brings its own
Routine. The dates,
Removed from holy saints
Are commandeered
And redirected by new owners,
Guided, steered
To new intents. St Nicholas,
No longer in a church,
Is in the magic grotto.
You can search
For cards and gifts
For valentines.
And Mothering Sunday
Is the time
For florists to rejoice.
Gather near,
Salesmen. Retailers
Be of good cheer.

 

Offers, counter-offers topping
’tis the season to be shopping
Merchants trading gross and margin
Shoppers searching for a bargain
Mingle in the joy of spending
Credit that is never ending

 

Let us arise and go now.
Let’s go down to the mall,
Where strange delights from east and west
Are on display for all.

 

Gleaming mounds of kitchen ware,
And trays of fresh baked bread,
Shining plastic shopping bags,
In pink and blue and red.
Give us new suits, new shoes, new looks.
Sell us designer lives,
New houses, furniture and cars
New children, husbands, wives.
Let us become the image on
The television screen.
Make us perfect as the ads in
The glossy magazine.

 

And when we struggle home again
Encumbered by the spoils
Of the perfect shopping mission,
Reward of all our toils,
Then we think we’ll be made happy
By things that we don’t need.
Or else it seems that, just perhaps,
These acquisitions lead
To a way out, an escape route,
A heaven here below,
Where we can live like movie stars
And share the joys they know. 

 

III  The Eclectics

 

Voodoo child
With the skull on the stick,
The shrunken head
With just a few grey hairs.

 

In the robes of an
Egyptian priest,
A tilak on your forehead,
the Torah in your hand.
Last survivor of
the ten lost tribes
You wander in a hall
of mirrors
Searching for the door.

 

Seeking to open
the final mysteries
Of where you come from
And where your thoughts go
When your brain has died. 

IV        In The Gallery

 

The objects you will see today
Are taken from the normal world
And placed here;
They are given new contexts,
Evocations, linkages,
Connections to memories
And strange imaginings.
They awaken dreams and visions
And nightmares.

 

This art makes no statements
Just allusions to the mysteries beyond.
Pilgrims have come
To see a miracle;
To partake of a vision of
Another world,
To participate vicariously
In a revelation.
They worship at an altar
Of everyday objects
Sanctified by
The hands of the artists;
Reaching out beyond their
Ordinary lives.

 

V         The Street Market

 

L Ron Hubbard is dead
He died in 1986 
     But in Times Square 
     You can still have 
     Your stress assessed.
A simple test 
     For a technological age, 
     An elegant combination 
     Of psychoanalysis and skin resistance.
Liberation for the soul 
     From the bonds of time 
     And age 
     And gravity.
I would have liked to ask him 
     If it is possible 
     For you, yourself, to believe 
     In a religion you’ve invented.
But L Ron Hubbard is dead.

 

VI        Postscript:

 

Of course, some retain a traditional faith.
The believers are putting each other to death.
A thousand years on, and nothing has changed
A bloody crusade can still be arranged.
The fanatics, still, are so dangerously right
That they’ll rape, burn and kill to show us the light.
Those old-time religions still offer a role,
Set things on fire, and capture the soul.

Author notes

This has been lurking on sharepoetry but I think I've done as much there as I can, so here goes.
Written November 12th, 2005

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  • melmo
    March 19

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    vey nice.....its hard to explain the feelings i got reading it...all i can say is i learned alot from it...and you did an excellent job on it...well done

  • TrippinBTM
    November 19, 2008

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    I like it, it's hard to pic a section i like most, so I wont. I'll say this about section II, though. You wrote :

    Offers, counter-offers topping
    ’tis the season to be shopping
    Merchants trading gross and margin
    Shoppers searching for a bargain
    Mingle in the joy of spending
    Credit that is never ending

    which seems to me to be another poem; a poem I'd like to read. The rhyming couplets work really well for it, but differs from the rest of that section. But maybe the point was to bring attention to that stanza?

    anyways, an all around great poem. Really shows the superficiality of religious belief across the board, from our "hallmark holidays" and the shift towards consumeristic celebrations of them, to the simplistic, literalist reading of holy books which leads to intolerance, war, and atrocities. Our religious ideas, in general, are the only true idols.

    Glad I wasn't scared off by the length... it's very worth the time.


  • Angelo di Luce gold member
    June 22, 2008
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    Allot of effort and hard work has gone into this write
    I can see the fine thoughts you convey to the reader
    you are right the old wooden gods, have no power to cure not even a headache, and why should they, have they gone away, or it is us who are the gods that lost their way, and forgot who we are.
    Enjoyed reading you.


  • leander Moderators member
    February 26, 2008

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    This is quite an original poem that you have written here, well, the topic you have chosen.

    I had to force myself though to read it all. I'm unfortunately one of those 'ignorant' and 'impatient' readers who have an attention span the size of an ant but I read through it all though, only thing is that I lost interest a bit...

    Chapter III was the one I like the most though very good use of imagery in there

    I think these would stand out better when they were written seperataly - but that's just my personal preference.

    Keep it up!
    Leander


  • hikaru9293
    January 27, 2008
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    Well definitely it feels a little abstract if you ask me but i am astonished by the length in which you wrote your poetry. I didn't really get the vibe for this so i'll have to say "no" ..maybe cause it's not my type. But the concept is interesting


  • Darkd
    January 8, 2008

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    Wow...I am absolutely amazed. Besides the length,this was fantastic. It's so sad how the old things are replaced and forgotten, almost like old trinkets or toys.

    My favorite parts were IV and I.

    "There is no longer mystery
    In their familiar wooden faces.
    When the light is turned on
    The shadows retreat into cupboards
    And under the beds with the dust."

    I loved these lines out of the first part. You do have to realize that everything is eventually forgotten, it's just a matter of time. It's all a matter of popularity. Kudos on the fantastic piece of literature.

  • R McG
    July 20, 2006
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    This poem is of an astounding length and quality, it shows just what can be done with effort and time. You have excelled yourself with this poem. I have never seen anything like it, it's splitting into chapters is so wonderfully professional and original that there is little the reader can do other than be impressed. well done and keep writing


  • LovesWithTheBreeze
    December 22, 2005
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    This was much longer than I anticipated for some reason, but I really enjoyed it. You are very talented and Im glad you brought it to AP to share with us. Great write, well done.


  • onerios13
    December 3, 2005
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    Unlike Anasuya, I couldn't really get into this poem, given its length. I'm going to have to vote a "no" on this one. Although I enjoyed the concept, I felt that any subject matter can be dealt with as quickly as possible. lol. It is harder to write shorter poems than longer, I do believe. Anyway, thanks for entering, but, regrettably, I'm opting to remove it.


  • Nina Gotti 2008
    December 1, 2005
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    I really liked this poem, when i read other peolples poems they just inspire me to keep on writting. I also write poetry. Writting poetry helps peolple in diffrent ways, it helps me get rid of stress, and lower it down. Its jut relaxing to me and its something that i really liek doing. I hope the best of luck for you and hope that you do not stop writting. I would be glad to keep on reading the things that you write. You may not think of it but some poems help people get rid of their problems and reading poems just has is way of people realizing how much people and things mean to them. I just really wish you the best of luck, and dont let others tell you, that you cant do something that you want to do and that you love doing i know i dont do that.

  • Philogos gold member
    December 1, 2005
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    Thank you very much for the applause. I agree that the length is a problem but I found it hard to fit the scale of what I was trying for into anything shorter.

  • Nicole Hanna
    December 1, 2005
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    I'll admit. This is WAY longer than I can normally deal with when it comes to poetry. lol. However, I really don't care what onerios's opinion is on this one. I happen to really like it, and it's staying wether she wants it to or not. There is some really stunning imagery in this. I'd like to see you perhaps play around with line-break choice, but otherwise, I find it to be quite captivating. Thanks for entering it!

  • amellowtruthaddict
    December 1, 2005
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    i like it

  • Cat gold member
    November 30, 2005
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    Brilliant!

    Often times in my writing I touch on religious Catholic symbols from my past. I like how this piece touches on so many and maintains a sense of balance and symmetry throughout. Each poem is its own entity deserving in its placement here and capable of a placement on its own page.

    again- brilliant.


  • tenshihijimushi
    November 30, 2005
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    I liked this poem. A little long for my tastes, but when I forced myself to sit down and read it through, I enjoyed it. Very thought-provoking. I especially loved the shopping part, I was thinking of everyone who does just use holidays as an excuse to shop. Well done!


  • Zayra Yves
    November 30, 2005
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    This is interesting and complex. I appreciate the philosphical bend within the deep spiritual questions and images being presented to the reader. Again, it leaves one with more questions than answers, as well as much to think about. I admire progression you have going through the stanzas with information and metaphor. It had a traditional feeling to it while moving into the modern. Maybe there will be a cycle that blooms from the one we are in and takes us deeper into spirituality, if we so choose. The modern age has given us many gifts, perhaps we are just clumsy at knowing how to use them and are still not ready for complete love or intimacy with others, and maybe that is the great problem...a lack of real love for oneself and their neighbor. Great writing! I enjoyed it and the dialogue.

  • Nausicaa
    November 29, 2005
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    Wow, that was wonderful. My favorite stanzas were The Old Gods and the Postscript- as a lover of ancient traditions, I can't help but feel sad when I see that more and more of them are lost every day. I really identified with that stanza. And the Postscript summed everything up very nicely, and read almost like sections of the Old Testament. Fantastic job.


  • Turtledove
    November 23, 2005
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    So many things presented, so little space. Overall, fantastic. You touch the bases cleanly without much dust. L. Ron Hubbard line is good. I have a question: Why would men create a religious concept that would curtail their thoughts, deeds, ambitions, and above all sexual mores? Men create; God relates. I trust in the Lord, but prefer the simple Biblical truths; what God says, not men like Mr. Hubbard. We are told that the Ten Commandments were written by God; could they too be a fraud. Only if the entire Bible is false, and men merely believe in what they have a need to believe in. YOu really got me going on this one. No need to pray for my soul, I am right with the Lord; just love thinking about the ramifications of religious right or left.

  • salparadise
    November 23, 2005
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    Excellent

    Fantastic and filled with scathing brilliance that refuses to be denied. My jaw dropped a few times while reading this. You depict the role of organized religion in the lives of most humans with an unimpeachable sense of righteousness - wonderfully, this indictment often takes the tone of a sermon itself, but a sermon that truly offers a clear window into human nature and age-old human needs. Again, a spendid work. Thanks for sharing this with me.


  • chills gold member
    November 20, 2005
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    I am not one of God's handmaidens - I just do the washing up. But I still say this is worth AT LEAST 10 reads. Print it off and take around with you. It's had 80 views - how's that for bloody brilliant????


  • Night Hope gold member
    November 19, 2005
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    '...To participate vicariously In a revelation. They worship at an altar Of everyday objects Sanctified by The hands of the artists; Reaching out beyond their Ordinary lives...' It is often a Poet's task to help reveal the humanity in the rest of the world...You've done well at that in this penning...It's a wonderful offering to us all, laden with exquisite imagery & a grand command of language...& it says much about your inner Spirit, as well...Thank you for sharing this with the rest of us...Be well, Poet... Wanda

  • Jacob H
    November 19, 2005
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    this is like a masterpiece man awesome job with this and continue the ingenious work,jake likes cake

  • idotska
    November 19, 2005
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    awesome

    bravo bravo bravo! this is a beautiful read. i especially liked the stanza about the headache pill miracle ) and the postscript's brutal truth is striking. loved reading it

  • Philogos gold member
    November 19, 2005
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    Your wish is my command. I agree with you.
    Edited on Nov 19, 4:16 p.m. because ''.


  • B Chandler
    November 19, 2005
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    in my opinion i think you couldve broken this write up into smaller reads but in any case thereof, in the first part of this write i think you could tweak it up a bit more...

    The old Gods are dusty.
    In their niches and corners
    They glower, impotent,
    Until someone decides
    To declutter and takes them down...
    To the auction room
    Or the car boot sale
    And see if they are worth anything.


    ...i saw that there was no need to say to so much

    Rae

  • Angel Soul
    November 19, 2005
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    wow...long


  • Princess Perdue gold member
    November 18, 2005
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    This is an exellent piece of work you have created here--and beautifully written.a very enjoyable read, thanks for sharing this.
    shaz xx


  • Shancy Fayre
    November 18, 2005
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    Very Interesting.

    This is certainly an interesting well written piece. I may not
    agree entirely with the theory here, there is a lot of truth in
    parts of it. Very Interesting. Shancy.


  • plinkyponk
    November 18, 2005
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    i liked the idea of them being written in glass as someone above said they are like art to be written on sculptures you have a lot to say and i imagine you could do so in many mediums it all makes sense and is very wise i like this a lot its very majestic and sane


  • bia
    November 18, 2005
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    Ooops... So many sophisticated comments overwhelms me and makes me wonder what to write. So, if I don't worry about those... Here is what I think of your poem:
    I find it repulsive and harsh. But in the same time I sence something else that I could not put my finger on... I personally support religion in general. But I am aware that some people in these various religions have failed to interpretate the actual message and so fail themselves and their religion by committing silly, sometimes even evil acts. However, I think that any effort to make this place more sane and spiritual should be applauded. The message I PREFER to get from your poem is that we have forgotten our faith and our willingness to create a better place... Hmmm.... Definitely mixed feelings... I would really appreciate to know what YOU meant with this poem. Hope that I make sense to you!

  • Harlequin
    November 18, 2005
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    Brilliant write Vic, can't put in to words at the moment what I feel but I will. This poem deserves a much wider audiance then here. Get back to you


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    November 18, 2005
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    Bravo my friend, the postscript alone is worthy of high praise. You cover a tremendous amount of ground in this piece, each section standing alone, yet together they merge into a deep philosophical journey. Well done. -Al

  • Philogos gold member
    November 18, 2005
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    Wow! Anyonita. I'm a bit overwhelmed but thank you very much.

    vic


  • anyonita jenea
    November 17, 2005
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    philogos: first of all. a standing ovation. so many of the stanzas in this piece need to be written on the glass windows of big city skyscrapers, need to be sewn into the skimmed through pages of textbooks, need to be preached. do we need an anecdote? i don't even know where to begin commenting. the parts that stood out the most to me, i've read and reread and have fallen in love with the wordage, the honesty, the imagery...for example: the eclectics. that is by far my favorite section. the last two lines of the second stanza and the last stanza in that part speak to me like no other. searching for where you came from...everyday i just want to know who i am. where did i come from? my faith tells me God created me. my faith tells me God loves me. my life and the people in it, don't always reflect that. that hall of mirrors, looking for a door...i just want to scream so loud, so high pitched that i shatter every mirror, that big pieces of it fall down around me like rain after the sky's held it in for so long. that clinking of glass on linoleum, the overwhelming confusion, falling away...i see all this in those words. i see me in those words. the entirety of this poem is well crafted, so well written, the voice is so clear, it would take decades to comment on everything life changing, on every good feeling emitted from your words. i wish i had both the time, the adjectives and the knowledge to do this poem justice. in short, this is brilliance. this is ingenuity. this needs to be memorized and recited and lived and recognized...
    anyonita

  • Philogos gold member
    November 17, 2005
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    Thanks for your comments, Bonnieq. I'm not sure what you disagree with. I am not endorsing all the substitute religions people are busy inventing and I certainly don't think that killing your enemies is a good way to follow Christ and his injunction to love them. Best wishes, vic


    Edited on Nov 17, 2:44 p.m. because ''.


  • BonnieQ silver member
    November 16, 2005
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    Excellent

    I must say that you have a remarkable talent, for this piece is exceptionally well-crafted and definitely shrewedly phrased. As one of God's handmaidens, however, I do disagree with much of this poem's content; save and except as it relates to pagan festivals having been incorporated into Christian festivals, an abomination before the Lord. And to top that, they've made each more about greed than love of Christ.

    As I said, you have a remarkable talent for weaving words into an astounding tapestry of life and movement and sound. Well done, poet.

    Love and hugs
    B♥nnieQ
    Associate Editor, WA
    Waltsan Publishing, TX

  • unknownpleasure
    November 16, 2005
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    no chilli, bossyness must be backed up by worth


  • chills gold member
    November 13, 2005
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    Just thought I'd say - this is worth more than ten reads everyone!! Do as I say cos I'm bossy.

  • Vampiric Kisses
    November 13, 2005
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    "Offers, counter-offers topping/’tis the season to be shopping/Merchants trading gross and margin/Shoppers searching for a bargain/Mingle in the joy of spending/Credit that is never ending" Those lines were awesome...This was a very truthful and thoughtful poem...Thanks for sharing!

  • olddrivelandrubbish
    November 13, 2005
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    close to perfect

    not going to waste words...
    the best thing ive ever read on this site

    the first 2 n the close - perfect
    all this coming from 1 who tries in a simmilar way to say what youve said - ace

  • CornBob
    November 13, 2005
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    Yes!

    I like your style, the flow and the way your thoughts go.


  • Sleeping Sandman
    November 12, 2005
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    I enjoyed reading your thoughts. But yes some who are devoted to the old religons consider war the way to make people belive but not all do. You ask great questions and point out good things it is a very good piece.

  • fredhib
    November 12, 2005
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    well what a thesis - interesting comments - who is the God person anyway - perhaps not a person at all

  • PalmettoSky
    November 12, 2005
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    awesome

  • Philogos gold member
    November 12, 2005
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    Thank you very much for your comment. I think there is something here about the supernatural always having to be hidden and out of reach by definition. Has God been left with no place to hide?


  • faderman1959
    November 12, 2005
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    Very thought provoking! People used to look to religion for guidance and comfort! Now they look to possessions to make them happy. The all mighty mall! I'm getting myself sidetracked here. To me your poem shows that religions have changed over the years in some ways in some ways not. It is still about the same thing no matter what it is called or when. It is about looking for something. Be it guidance or comfort or happiness or what ever makes you happy. To me you have showed this in many different ways in the different parts of your poem. You really got me thinking with this one! signs of a good poem in my book! Thanks for sharing it with us!
    Edited on Nov 12, 10:44 because ''.

  • Molly Densmore silver member
    November 12, 2005
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    Very well done, an interesting write and very creatively done. Though long, I gave it its chance and found it to be very interesting and your thoughts are very well thought out. Nicely done and thanks for sharing.


  • grannyeri gold member
    November 12, 2005
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    Very profound statements you have made here, and many are right on - religion has changed over the years, but for those who believe, it explains everything and allows them to go on doing what they have been doing for years, even if it really isn't 'right'.

  • Philogos gold member
    November 12, 2005
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    Yes. There isn't much of a market for long poems these days. Could you treat it as 6 short ones, perhaps?


  • November 12, 2005
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    too long I lost interest. perhaps its just the mood Im in

  • Philogos gold member
    November 12, 2005
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    Thank you very much for your kind comment. A topic like this is always just out of reach.

    vic


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    November 12, 2005
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    Well it is a great travel of a very sensitive subject but contains the spark very much definately in its great description even. The length of the write is indicating the strength of the poet which is just a remarkable one. The thoughts are very deeply explained .I must say it is really appreciable write.prabhudayal khattar

  • chills gold member
    November 12, 2005
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    Need to read over and over

    So glad you brought this over. Think I missed part III before. That's me in the corner, losing my religion. (REM song, I expect you know). I particularly like part II as I am the world's most unenthusiastic shopper... Don't worship at the Mall if I can help it. Prefer to worship stones on the beach. x debs

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