The pen and the paper
a midnight duet did dance
between the lines tiptoe
the whirl wind of romance
twisting and turning
two tango for the thrill
with hearts truly in hand
blood seeping from the quill
Dying to tell the story
captured never to grow old
each pirouette immortalised
hard backed embossed in gold
The paper blank awaiting
the tender touch of a lover
caressed undressed and willing
in anticipation of another
the fluidity of emotion
escapes just in time
once upon a page to see
within reason and a rhyme
the pen in all it's honesty
will say what needs to be said
here between the sheets my love
dreams come true in bed
Author notes
Is it not a love affair we all share?
Written November 11th, 2005
A contest entry
- Do a novel love poem and beat this poem /* by Abdul T Alishtari.
300 points, ended November 25, 2005, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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You are such an awesome writer. You always manage to tell a kind of a story with your choice of words. You paint such vivid pictures with your imagery. I'd love to be the paper that the pen touches. Another amazing work!
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Damn!
I thought this was lovely Pugster. Made me drift into thoughts about girls and me dancing beneath their skirts but then again I always feel the lovesick lines a little too soon-
My fave:
'two tango for the thrill
with hearts truly in hand
blood seeping from the quill
Dying to tell the story'
Magnetic words, as usual... -
Hey Pug, I think this is luvverly, perfect, excellent. It's fluid and gorgeous, i adore the images it gives me, and it just seems to have the right level of passion and imagination and um, loveliness. (Okay, I've lost all my descriptiveness but you get what I mean...i love it).
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84/100
Analysis Chart
Authenticity (Believability or realism) 1 to 20 pts equals 15
Theme Clarity (relevance to contest) 1 to 20 pts equals 15
Complexity (Work, plan and style) 1 to 20 pts equals 15
Transcendence (Artistic conclusion) 1 to 20 pts equals 19
Expressiveness (Some say artfully said) 1 to 20 pts equals 20
Remember this is subjective by host totals 1 to 100 equals 84
Edited on Nov 25, 8:12 because 'one point off 84/100'. -
Keul dude!
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this is such a lovely poem and shows love through out..Linda
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Pug. Please read and follow the rules and have a great write in my contest.
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