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Many miracles

I don't need to be
the girl you rescue.
Thanks,
but I can perform
my own miracles.
I can fly away
from the pretty package
in which she tried to wrap you up
and tie your pretty bow.

I told her it was useless.

The sky is dark
and I'll melt into the rain
and you
if I wait any longer.
So even if she tells me not to,
I swear I won't stay this time.

You are my many miracles
and if I can't fly
at least I'll land somewhere soft.

Author notes

This is Option 5, I've rewritten Waterdance by Crimson Ice.
Written November 11th, 2005

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  • olddrivelandrubbish
    November 15, 2005
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    safe and reassuring

    at least I'll land somewhere soft.

    luvly close
    really enjoyed it
    it'd be luvly to think we'de all got crashmats that made us feel that
    ide luv it
    i tend to immagine that landing in the nettles or brokan glass
    respek


  • PerfectImperfection
    November 11, 2005
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    I LOVE THIS!!! When I put in the option of re-writing my poems; I wasn't even sure if I would get any... This was great! It went so well with my own, but gave it a more sophistocated feel. When I wrote Waterdance many didn't get it... I am so very impressed, and I think you have done a *SPECTACULAR* job with this... You have certainly made it your own! ~~* *~~