I love you

With no restrictions,
I love you

Chapter one
I love you

Chapter ten
I love you
and love , love in you

I build you
A Pyramid of love
with a Nile that overflows ,

My love to you eternal

Deeper than ,seven seas

Don’t crush hope inside my ribs ,
before understanding me ,
Don’t blame my weakness
It is you, who made me weak

I need you
more than ever

Your chains
just make me happy
don't ever set me free

I am a gold fish in your aquarium
let me drink your love
I am glowing

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Written November 11th, 2005

A contest entry

Do a novel love poem and beat this poem /* by Abdul T Alishtari. 300 points, ended November 25, 2005, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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Abdul T Alishtari
November 25, 2005
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86/100
Analysis Chart

Authenticity (Believability or realism) 1 to 20 pts equals 20
Theme Clarity (Know what the write means) 1 to 20 pts equals 18
Complexity (Work, plan and style) 1 to 20 pts equals 10
Transcendence (Artistic conclusion) 1 to 20 pts equals 18
Expressiveness (Some say artfully said) 1 to 20 pts equals 20

Remember this is subjective by host totals 1 to 100 equals 86
unbroken5
November 11, 2005
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keep writing the potential is there
misticmoonlite
November 11, 2005
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short but sweet good luck..Linda
Abdul T Alishtari
November 11, 2005
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Thank you so much for entering this contest. Good writes
Edited on Nov 11, 5:13 because ''.