A shadow looms against the light,
lumbers slowly in the dark of night.
Casts a long slendor form,
slideing cross the oak wood floor.
Liquid movements silent stealth,
climbing stairs elongates it's self.
At the landing it stops in hesitation,
head hung low in deliberation.
Reaching the mahogany balustrade,
ascending next flight steps delayed.
Cresting summit shrinks in size,
in the wall mirror I see it's eyes.
Frightened eyes staring seen,
that fragile shadow I see was me.
~~~Suseann~~~
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#5 This one won the gold in (crivanea's-Lucky Sevens contest)
Written November 10th, 2005
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impressive..nice vocab..lol..looking in a dictionary...anyway..this is a very intersting version of shadow..if u have a chance..read my shadow my molly densmore..her piece is also about shadow...i am comparing urs with hers right now...very different..striking..anyway..good piece
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Thanks tootsvegan.I'm not a form poet.I take a stab at them once in a while.I suppose being a 14 line poem,it's somewhat a sonnet.Glad you enjoyed.~~Suseann
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That was good, is this any particular form? it looks a bit like a sonnet but I can't quite remember all the forms of sonnet. Anyway, I liked the revelation at the end which the whole poem led up to. Hope you did well in the contest.
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this was very well done, and it was touching, thanks for sharing, good luck in this contest, keep up the awesome poetry!!
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OHHHH this brought chills down my spine...
Good Job Suseann!!!! Good luck in the contest!
S~
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Cool write suseann. Wow...you perfectly desribed a shadow and it's movements. That was awesome!!!
~Lyrical
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Oh my, suseann, what a great job you did with option #5. Awesome!
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