Sticking her fingers in her mouth,
She sadly cries in a fit,
The food that was heading south,
Now ends up in the toilet,
"Go to your room, no Dinner",
She sits alone in despair,
She tells herself, "get thinner"
no one was there to care,
She'd only eat once a week,
her restrictions grew much bolder,
Stomach hurting when she'd speak,
Her body felt so much colder,
Not knowing it'd feel this crappy,
Her world was now just falling down,
She had lost all that made her happy,
But a smile weighed more than a frown.
Author notes
Written November 10th, 2005
A contest entry
- okay my last contest was kinda a flop so heres a new one.. by KissMyEyes.
564 points, ended December 5, 2005, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Size zero by Entwining Beauty.
300 points, ended September 11, 2007, 12 entries
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Excellent all the emotion of hating food are here maybe you have experiance this yourself excellent write good luck in my contest
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Thanks!!
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OMG!!! this is the best so far!! i absolutely am blown away by this peice!! Amazing .. simply Amazing!! Good Luck.
<3
Sara -
Death makes me giggle
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Wow Great write
Thanks for entering, Goodluck.
Best Wishes
(¯`•.Tracey.•´¯)
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is this about an anorexic? i'm guessing that it is. (they must feel crappy alot :L) one would think that you've actually expirienced this yourself.
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. You did a very good job. You know what, this poem reminds me a lot of Amber's style. It is something that she would have written and she would have also rhymed. I guess that shows how a great match you two are . I liked this poem. You have an important message. My favorite line was the last one, it was excellent. I am very happy to see you on AP too and I look forward to reading more of your work. Keep writing.
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oh wow...i loved the last two lines especially..
i am glad you decided to join AP.
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