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Out of The Bowl

Stigma shining out
The light of day,
Pallid and prompted
By properties sway.

Satisfactory glory
Of fitting the bill.
One's boots to shine,
Shoes needing fill.

Tell me who I am,
In case I don't know.
Label me fable with
Your cause and show.

Example of failure?
Success by your hand!
You heap adulation
If I take your stand.

Yet there you waiver
Inside your own head
Extreme echo of voices,
Correct and purebred.

The air of confusion
In finding your mind,
Questioning rudeness
Of rhythm and rhyme.

Properly pointing won't
Bring you to whole
'Till you know who you are
And swim out of the bowl.

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Written November 10th, 2005

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  • cardiphonia
    November 24, 2005
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    Wonderful rhyme...wow!! I loved how you put your ideas together ..it's almost catchy...out of the bowl indeed!! Very honest...loved it!!

  • heart on sleeve
    November 11, 2005
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    wow this is great the rhyme in this was excellent a very tuneful piece of work with some great words used great poem lol abigailxx