Do you realize
that I study you
with harsh lines of indigo?
I dissect your emotions
with an empathetic knowledge of how you feel,
but you betrayed the morals of humanity.
My mind is struggling to comprehend
the in humane thoughts
coursing through your fears
that cause a false accusation
of such an extremity
that my heart may not forgive.
Author notes
This is about a friend several years ago who when was caught having sex at the age of 17 by her dad claimed she was raped. He was 21, he would have gone to jail. However,her father knew she was lying, but then at school she turned all of my friends against me by convincing them that I was not on her side so that I wouldn't lose my boyfriend.
Written November 9th, 2005
A contest entry
- Can this be happening? by ciara12.
1350 points, ended March 9, 16 entries
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A lot of emotion here in these words, it is obvious that this is a wound one may never recover from. Me personally, though, find it hard to see indigo as harsh, for me it is a soft and soothing color. That was my only confusion in this. Other than that
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High school is so dramatic. I've only been out of it for a year, but for me, the drama was always pregnancy and how someone got pregnant from cheating on their boyfriend, and how it wasn't their boyfriend's baby.
Anyway, I'm not quite understand the relevance of indigo? Might just be me being too tired, or there is something else that just isn't clicking. Aside from that, I feel you captured the anger and confusion nicely. -
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She had blue eyes which is why I used the color indigo. This piece wasn't necessarily about drama and high school. It was about how shocked I was that she was willing to put him in jail just so that she wouldn't get in trouble. It could have happened out of high school as well.
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amazing lol i really liked how you made this abou high school love or so it seemed and i really think you did amazing!!
love forever and always
Ciara Ann
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This has nothing to do with High school love, it has to do with betrayal and friendship.
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ahh highschool ... I think that most of us really get our 1st taste of what love could be in Highschool, great penning and good luck with the contest!!
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This has nothing to do with High school love, it has to do with betrayal and friendship.
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thanks for the comment and for letting me know about my text, i didnt realize it.
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A wonderful poem, concise and filled with emotion. My only complain is that I had to highlight it to read it. You may want to change the text color. It is the same color as your background.
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