I'll tell you a story of yesteryear
an ancient chant unsung
for long ago, before there was time
there was magic.
Magic today is rarely seen by man
but few people can.
So let me tell you
my friend
the magics of today
Lights on streets from cars in rain
daggering in the ground
eye of bird blinking at
joyous strain of sound
look of boy feeling good
about something that he's learnt
puppies wagging tails of fur
miracle of birth.
Math book burning in the fire,
far-away plane raising higher,
baby's cry, and flower's ground,
snowflakes falling all around.
A wise old proverb from
a wise old man
"Where there is life there is hope"
There are more,
but to voice them all
would take a thousand years
but saddest of them all, I say,
the sound of falling tears
Author notes
uh,.. it took me all day to write this! and i thinkit is my best yet!
dedicated to: driscoll. here ya go.
Written November 9th, 2005
A contest entry
- Everyone's INVITED by DreamingMoon.
400 points, ended December 16, 2005, 76 entries
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Dear heaven, loking back at this... It's painful!!!
so...
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CHEESY!!!!!!!!!
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i think this is great...i do love the rhyming and also how u expanded on the magic of today...i definitely agree with u on the last stanza!great write!
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i think this is realy good
you did a good job wording this poem
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judged fair- I thought this was an ok poem, I think it needs a new title.
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This piece is very inspirational, and you gave the reader just the right amount of words. The idea of the proverbs could be taken in so many different directions. Your poem begins something great that has much yet to be discovered. Wonderful write!
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while obviously young, you have an excellent grasp of words and their application for imagery. you rhyme well also. you definitely need to stay on the path of poetry because you have a real talent here and, as it develops, you will become powerful with your words.
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LOL! I always wanted to burn that crappy math book, and now i got 2 write about it!
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wow!
holy moly!!!! This was unbelievable......i loved the rythming! This was totally brilliant because it had funny parts like 'math book burning in the fire' that was hilarious....always wanted to do that i have! Had a sad ending but its true the saddest thing is sadness itself.
michael
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