She applies comedy to her life
Like Aristotle convinced her in fragments—
A laugh contained inside the test tubes
Housing future fallen angels,
As Huxley would concoct
In his factories
Of perfect genetic mistakes.
Dante’s happy ending divine doesn’t
Cut it.
She is her own audience,
Applying Plato’s eye for morals that are updated in 1984.
And she shocks her own audience
For ruling herself out of category
Reason is
“This is what’s easy for me.”
Would Horace consider her life/theater
A form of forgivable nodding—
This orchestration
Of falling in, falling out,
Without self-remorse,
But a sneer at the mirror
For coming back out unscathed
—willing to do it again?
Dante’s happy ending divine can’t
Cut it.
It’s a cycle of
Lopsided grinning faces—
And a confusion
Between decision and self-mutilation.
Author notes
any suggestions on improvement? got lots of abstractions. Please help me.
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Written November 9th, 2005
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thanks. finally! someone came and commented. i thought i scared people away because of the references. thanks again.
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I found this poem inaccessible. Some of the imagery is very abstract which in and of itself is not necessarily wrong. But combined with references to how certain historical figures would or would not treat those metaphores... it is something which would require a very specific audience.
Having read some plato and having read 1984, I certainly don't know what you mean by "outdated morals in 1984". 1984 does not contain any outdated morals. 1984 contains sophisticated and quite plausible representation of how a an everlasting and completely totalitarisn political system can be evolve.
And we are headed in that direction only slightly slower than the George Orwell feared we would.
However.. in so far as I dont know what the other parts of your poem talk about, I don't put much significance in my inability to decode that little tidbit.
The meter of the poem is angsty... if that helps at all.
Cheers! -
In the end however it all comes down to this...what your heart says...
to live...or to die....that's the question only one person can ultimately answer...you/the one faced with this decision.
I like the freedom of this write and the message it brings forth, I like that it reveals a little straight-up detail, but not enough to call it full disclosure. The reader can intrepet this write in several manners...may see it as related to cutting/ or suicide/ or abortion/etc...
Strong write, with a strong image-invoking, thought-provoking message within. Really nice work luv.
~Sherry~
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