Wandering through the whispering wind
Cares, fears, and dark shadows
Loving arms catch true desperation
Facing my tomorrows
Take me to new heights eternally
So I may never fall
Embracing my dreams of hope adrift
Where I can heed the call
Forgiveness alas I only pray
To reach a love anew
Reaching for a metaphoric life
Where all my dreams come true
Finalize the love I need in me
To fill my voids within
As life progresses and age forecasts
I only long to mend
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Thanks for reading my dear brother and I, we both appreciate your time! Much love, Tom, and Tim
Written November 8th, 2005
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Thanks!
I wish you all the best too sweet soul sis, I really do, may every day of your life you find love within the things you do, as your poetry is also very moving and beautiful as you.
Bro Timothy
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Take me to new heights eternally
So I may never fall
Embracing my dreams of hope adrift
Where I can heed the call
now, h tis is what your dear sister here is hoping for. i so wish. you both did a great job onhtis one. viyanna
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Hmm.. now I knew Timothy was a poet, and I knew Timmy had a way with words... but now the bro comes into play! My my my, what a TALENTED family! I have to say that I really enjoyed this write, because it really shows the emotion.... of wanting a life other than yours. Well..at least that's what I get. I would like to say, that... as always... Timothy, you pen with such a way...that I can't tell where you wrote and Tom picked up!! Very honored to have been able to read this
~Aimee
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very well done
I loved this poem! Giving HOPE from turmoils and REBUILDING lost voids. I soooooo very know the feeling, my friend, Many hugs always to be found when one is needed-- you know where to look!! -
I love this, Timothy! Very nicely done! Thank you!
Much Love,
♥ Maureen
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Gorgeous and inspirational, soulfull and moving! I also admire the presentation with the cloudy backdrop. Beautiful.
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this is truly amazing. i love it
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great
Awsume....This is one the best I have ever read... -
brilliant
I love this poem! awesome work, keep it up! -
very good emotional poem.
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I really enjoyed this poem good job
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its deep , meaningful , and done in a very proffisional way !! congratualtions !!!
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Amazing.
It's really good, amazing imagery and wow...this is amazing. -
The word amazing doesn't begin to describe this poem! lovely job.
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what a touching poem.Lovely
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I really liked it good job.
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ahhh so you are hidding a brother are ya
. well dig him out and tell him I think the two of you write wonderfully together!! awsome write you two!
huggles
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this is rele sad and sooo sweet good job keep it up
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Wow! Love the poem! Great job! This poem really speaks to me! I really enjoyed it!
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excellent
well Tim & Tom , this is a truly remarkable collabo. , the poeticweaver and wordweaver - the titles alone are great -- for there's that sense of intrigue for these weavers , you know what a weaver does and i think you too weavers felt the muse on your head and straight forwad went for it .
it's rich in emotion and feel . the opening line itself speaks beyond all , 'wondering through the whispering wind' -- yes we all do indeed wonder through the diverse whispering winds of life , the many colorful things of life we long for all are encompassed in the many array winds , and truly thus i say this is one of the best things to touch me like this .
embracing the hopes, new dreams , keeping the faith , falling up gain and again and still managing to stand tall , hoping fathoming a newer brighter horizon full and rich with all the possibilities that can be - infinity .
everyone is indeed searching for love - for warmth -- for somewhere they truly belong --- and you know sometimes "situations and people inspire others to do more" thus the human soul not alone is it in a constant battle to find itself but to emerse itself in the brim of existence. -
thimply thuperb!
wow! such a yearn to be something more... i love the 4th line! something about it is really well done! 'facing my tomorrows' is a superb choice of words. simple but bloody effective!! i do applaud! thanks for a great read! -
Aww, I just read the comment from lil Tim, he does indeed have fabulous writers in his family
Thanks for the share, I absolutely adored this. Makes me sigh
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Beautiful. It speaks to the longing in all of us.
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this is good work very touching
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I like this, and to work off the last comment, I do think you can reach the life that you want if you long for it long enough, usually, unless you wish you were a martian or something. Anyway, I liked the poem a lot, it was really good, I didn't read it quite the same way as some of the other people, as there was an element of recovery and wanting to find new love, I can't say I fully understood all of it, but the parts that I think I understood were well written. Good work on rhyming and especially on spelling and punctuation, it's nice to read something that is punctuated correctly.
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Well longing for somthing is what makes life complete without wanting something nothing would matter great poem.
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Can one reach the life they long for by longing long enough? I think one has to make thier life what they want it to be, and have no regrets at the end that they didn't do all they could to make it so.
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Good flow and rhythm. I felt as though I was drifting on air
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very sad, very sweet, very touching. lovely.
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lovely poem, the background suits the poem too. Nicely written and the flow is well done. Kepp up the good writing, thanks for sharing,
nat -
nice piece you've written; in fact, i think everyone has a similar or related dream or aspiration...in real life, it is indeed ironic that when one searches...one finds nothing; when youre busy with your life and have no time for searching...THEN something or somebody pops up when least expected...lol
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Very Nice
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awesome
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Well that was one of the best poams i have read for a while,i really loved it,it is sweet,beautiful and full of hope you have written such a great piece,i really liked this bit,Forgiveness alas I only pray
To reach a love anew
Reaching for a metaphoric life
Where all my dreams come true.Well done keep up the good work.Be well and so shall it be
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Truly brilliant! Each and every word was spectacular! I applaud this poem. I want to read more of your poems this was so good! No, it was phenomenal! Great job! Keep up the majestic work.
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Excellent!
I love this piece you two wrote, great job, My Dad and Uncle Tom!!! Yeah!!! Thanks for sharing the Weaver's flow!!!
-lil Tim
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THE TITLE......THE LIFE YOU LONG WHAT??????
WHAT DOES IT MEAN ???????????????? -
Are you twins?
You have the same rhythm, and thoughts. Very nicely done, and I hope the mending comes through the threads of time, intricately woven together here. Beautifully written.
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wow! that was really pretty and very imaginative. i had to read it a couple of times to get it all, but it was worth it... as always im never disappointed.
luv always
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Wow...That made me feel better and yet worse...Um not quite sure how, but it really was wonderful.
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love the peice. very veyr moving!
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very good poem, the way it flows, enhances its material
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A need in all that far too few realize. Well done you two. very smooth flow and powerful words. I was wondering at the first word as to if it is meant to be Wondering or Wandering?. Nevertheless - very nice and thanks for sharing!!
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You have a great piece here I really enjoyed it. It gives you that little ray of hope.
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It is really a pleasant write revealing a great hope of the heart through and through with its intensity too. The thoughts are very pure and contins the honesty of life itself too. The structure of the poem is very philosphical and very sentimental which is brining the essence of the eternity too. The flow of the write is very impressive and just to the point too. I really appreciate this work. prabhudyal khattar
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This was beyond any words of reverance. I cant fathom myself to find the words to praise this. Its great and it touche dme on so many different levels. The life I know now, Im only trying to mend. I can say no more but this was fanatastic!
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So glad I click here! Happiness sometimes har
After all the comments what more can I add. Awesome, sweet, filled with hope, that does not end with the last words. Beautiful write-- Thanks for the read. Much love you 2! -
Awesome work!! I loved it!!
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I was sort of confused at first but then i read it until i got it. this is a really pretty poem.
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Awwwwwwwwww...... it makes one still reading such a masterpiece. Just clicking around in the featured ones I am so happy I picked this one. It drifts with me, I hope to read much more from you both.
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its hard to keep up the flow and coherency of thought in a collaboration, but you two did flawlessly!
Forgiveness alas I only pray
To reach a love anew
Reaching for a metaphoric life
Where all my dreams come true
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awesome
wow this was a wonder to read .. great job i love it. thank you much for sharing your words with me. -
Heavenly Weaving!
It’s a fine line that after completion
There is still much left to do
In dreams hope and love anew
I embrace the words of two heavenly weavers
Your beauty enchants all of us
You matter to each heart whom you weave with
You create universal beauty in your magic themes
When we open our heart to the fullness of love
Then our lives and hearts can mend
Many blessing to both of you my new old friends.
You are finally where you had hoped and dreamed to be
Well worth whatever labors you had to go through to enjoy this feeling
Your hearts are both full of gratitude and love in your magic weaving.
Namaste Blessed Be, Sharron
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Two weavers come together and pen this piece for all to enjoy and indulge within. A wonderful masterpiece created by two souls, both holding tremdous talents and so much love. One cannot help but to love a piece such as this. A true honor to have had this artistic poetry bestowed before my eyes.
Thank you both for such an amazing treasure.
Blessings
celticmoon
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Wow more poeticweavers! This was wonderfully written. I am amazed day after day, time after time when I read your poems, whether they be collabs, dark,hope, love or spirtual you always out do yourself with more inventive words and emotions. Great write you two, seems I am going to have to go and Check out Tom, Tim
~Carrie
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simply gr8t !
Hi dear poeticweavers,
Yet another fine fabric of poetic weave from you !
The warp & weft of words displayed like an Awesome Linen !
Crafted like a silky touch,strected our hearts to wonders!
Perfect placement of lined,so much devoted confessions,sensual meanings.
God has blessed you with all the treasure of poetic words.
you're perfect in everything,please,keep on flying !
In this wonderful AP world,
let your wings touch the Ocean of Hearts
you know how strong you are? How much you shine,
We know you won our hearts dear!
fly,fly non-stop,open your wings of poetic beauties more for us.
regards
subbu (purefriendship)
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We are all growing to maturity in love. It is love that raises us to new heights of mental, physical and spiritual passion. I believe your poem speaks of this.
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sounds like a shakespear piece.. you could be the modern day shakespear.good work keep it up
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interesting some what.But good job
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Why this was really good. I could see the images in my head as I read line to line. Love it!
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An emotionally filled poem with such wonderful images. Something hard to strive for, but I am sure some reach this state of metaphoric life.
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So hopeful in its tapestry of words woven for the reader to just gape and applaud and a great poem at that in the sense of the reader i.e.me being a thorough pessimistic creature...and yet I can see some light at the end of the tunnel..Shubs
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Your Allpoetry name suits you well. The words you have weaved together have formed a beautiful poem.
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wow... this is really really good. i like it a lot. from the very first line to the very last you had my attention. great job! keep up the great work.
love autumn
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excellent writing
This is so beautiful. It has such a soft and tender sentiment within each line. Your words, "Take me to new heights eternally, so I may never fall" and "finalize the love I need in me" and "I only long to mend". It reads like a prayer that I, myself have hoped and wished for many times.
etherealforu
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Nice write - the rhythm is somewhat erratic and the rhyming strains, but overall it is a well written piece - needs to be read as a free verse.
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Awesome write.
i loved it.
"Take me to new heights eternally
So I may never fall
Embracing my dreams of hope adrift
Where I can heed the call"
that was my favorite stanza.
great job
keep it up
~Midnite rae
[the morbid mistress]
aka:marissa rae
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...Speechless...this is very well written. You both did an incredible job. I love how you don't have any punctuation in the poem...it really adds to it and just causes it to flow. Excellent write. God Bless and Take care
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good imagery and alliterative clauses
Not one speck of punctuation! Intentional? Guess so. But the progressive thoughts of wonder forgiveness reaching finalize void mend; bring it all together. Neat. Too bad love isn't easier to come by; for some it is. Take me for example! Ha. Don't you believe it. But metaphoric? Maybe. All this said; I like it. -
Very nice. I feel as you in I only want to mend.
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this is quite perfect in depiction
and quite nicely written
and having been in a similar position
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Timothy, this is so beautiful and speaks to me on a level I can't even discuss. My heart longs to live as it does in my dreams. I do have a metaphoric life, but I want it to be real, I want it all and I want love. ~sigh, sorry...I am thinking through my fingertips this morning. Beautiful hon. Just beautiful.
~Lyrical
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Poetic, this was a very pretty write about hope and longing for the things that lay within our hearts. good write image and Visions
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Metaphorically Grand
Awesome write, thanks so much it was so uplifting and hopeful, my favourite line was
Reaching for a metaphoric life
Where all my dreams come true......
Maybe I'll get there someday, thanks again, best poem I've read in a while. Take care always
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It's a good poem. Was it intentional not to rythme the first stanza? The poem is a little confusing - is it possible to clarify it a little? Also, do you mean "wandering" rather than "wondering"? Hope this is helpful! Keep writing!
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This was really amazing, so well written and read, I really enjoyed this and think you have really a great talent. Excellent write. Thanks so much for sharing this, I loved it.Beautiful poem, i really like this part....Forgiveness alas I only pray
To reach a love anew
Reaching for a metaphoric life
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As the previous commentator noted "Nice enough and pretty too". But although it is well-written and pleasant to read, it didn't convey any clear or original message to me, except a sense of hope for the future.
Major negative: the title is unclear. Have you left a word off by accident? Shouldn't it read "The Life I Long FOR" ??????????????????????????????????????????
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Nice enough. Pretty too.
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great poem
Beautiful poem, i really like this part....Forgiveness alas I only pray
To reach a love anew
Reaching for a metaphoric life
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Awesomwe!!!1wonderfully put together in a few well choosen. I would love to see more of your collaborations. great hope keep penning and hope the future and all that it portends for the person in love. nice flow
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This is a beautiful poem that goes with nice word flow to produce a powerful effect of great hope and enthusiasm about
the future and all that it portends for the persona in love.
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This was really amazing, so well written and read, I really enjoyed this and think you have really a great talent. Excellent write. Thanks so much for sharing this, I loved it.
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That is just wonderful, i love it makes me i dont know lol i got a kool feeling that I get thro out my body when i read something that is very inspiring.. well done it just flowed.. amazing job
Nikkieta -
Breath of Fresh Air!
this makes me want to try the whole optomistic thing lol very nice, i loved the last line! i only long to mend, it tied everything together really well! -
*sighs contentedly*
So good to read something optimistic on this site! Really uplifting and hopeful..the last stanza makes me feel like soaring (in a kind of limited, sappy human kinda way!). Only thing I'd suggest is changing eternally to eternal in the second stanza - just seems to scan better. Great stuff though. xx Rach xx
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Exquisite beautifully crafted two thumbs up!!
This is so beautiful Refreshing, pristine Excellent work You two work wonderfully well together I would love to see more of your collaborations ... "Forgiveness alas I only pray
To reach a love anew
Reaching for a metaphoric life
Where all my dreams come true" A dulcet repast in words thank you for such and enchanting piece!! Wishing you both much success in all of your endeavors
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