When you are in my arms, I feel my soul complete
My life could not get better, because it's you that's made it sweet
As a smile comes across your face, my heart becomes tranquil and calm
Holding your body gently, and caressing you with my palms
As we sit together, I think about my life
And how since you have been in it, it just feels so right
I stroke your beautiful hair, as on my shoulder you rest
You are my angel from above, and my life has truly been blessed
I never want to let you go, I wish to stay entwined within your arms
When I hold you then look into your eyes, they sparkle like a charm
You have shown me your heart, and how your love is real
There are no words to express, the emotions that I feel.
You make my life complete, you are my heart, my soul, my all
The cornerstone of my being, without you I would fall
When our lips touch each others, my heart is in perfect bliss
There is nothing better in life, than to feel your loving kiss
I want you to be with me, and stay forever in my arms
There is no other person, who's soul shines just like a star
And as I think about my life, and what is now bright was once so dim
Your essence surrounds my soul, and I can't wait to see you again
Author notes
Ashley I love you so much, you are everything to me. I just wish I could hold you in my arms forever. @>-----
Written November 7th, 2005
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WOW! I HAVE NEVER READ SUCH DEEP, MEANINGFUL POETRY! AWESOME WORK
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I was testing your theory, as stated in your current contest, that you are an above average poet, I won't enlighten you as to my own opinion on the matter, as it is simply opinion and therefore unimportant. However this is a highly emotional poem, one can feel the calm and the affection, although perhaps the rhyme could seem a little forced in places, perhaps free verse might have made it slightly different, your poem of course and thus your decision. Anyway you are clearly happy with your poem and since its personal that is all that matters so well done, well written and keep up with your writing.
Dara
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beautiful, so many feelings you described and the way you described them, take me one of my own memories.
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Hello, this is a very beautiful piece that made my heart move...thank you. It was a wonderful write...Farewell, Lost Crow Child
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Hi,AppStPoet:
Wow this is a very loving piece it is full of warmth and love and is also very well written.You are such a gifted poet and I always enjoy reading your poem's my friend,well done.
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This is a real deep piece of work. I can tell that you have love for this chick. I just wanted to say that u gotta dope cut right here. holla -
this is a wonderful poem and i can really feel the emotion but i do agree with dona, there are a few minor things that you could look back at to make this piece a bit easier to read. other than that nice work
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Beautifuly Written
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wow usually i dont like love poems but this one was so sweet. i hope you give this to your ashley, i know she'd cry i would if my boyfriend gave me this poem, it sounds liek something that could go into a card like a valentines day one, but anyways it was beautiful, dont stop writing
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As I think about you in my life, and what is now bright was once so dim
Your essence surrounds my soul, and I can't wait to see you again
^^loved this part. you showed powerful emotion in this poem i think you and this person must bne very happy together. good write. -
Right, if a guy I really cared about wrote this for me... I'd swoon and give him some major lovin'. However, this is not for me and it is not perfect. If you wanted this to be a little easier to read you could break each line at the comma you've placed in the middle of them and make twice as many stanzas. Try reading it through and getting rid of the rhymes that seem forced or cheesy. Overall a good piece...it just needs some fine tuning, so to speak. Also, just because I applaud your poem does not mean I want you to applaud mine. If it deserves applauding...do so. Otherwise, forget it. Keep up the great work!!
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this is one of the best poetry i have ever read. wow it was amazing. you did an excellent job on it. it made me cry too!
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awww!!!! i am like in tears right now! that was so amazing. gawd...i wish someone wrote me something so sweet..Great write
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nice job! it flows really well and i love the nice... i dont know. it just had something that was really well, good.
<3 Lindzii
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yea, i have been reading your work also, i really like some of the stuff you do. Some of it brings an urban beat to poetry. I have been checking out all of you stuff, you are a really good poet. Thanks for the support I definately look forward to your next post
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Yeh man this is some good work you got here, you told a wonderful story in through this word. It was very deep and romantic and it's easy too tell this came straight from the heart and nowhere else. Nice work man keep it up. I've been reading your work for a awhile back when you pin was Washedinblood I believe. So I am glad to see your still writing. -
this is a great love story a good write a few words could be removed to tighten it up abit the flow is good lol abigailxx
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yea i like this poem.it flows and is very touching right now i'm going through the same things so i like knowing others feel the same
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this is beautiful! So sweet and sincere! I just loved it..............
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