Met an angel on the corner
selling feathers from his wings
he said 'I really need the money
and they're not good for anything'
Met an angel on the corner
and I asked what was his name
he said 'it doesn't really matter
in the end we're all the same'
Yeah, we all fall down, but we build our bridges
and we reach for the sky, but it's just too far
Yeah, we turn our backs on our burning bridges
We fly too high, and our wings fall apart
Met a devil at the shelter
spooning hot soup into bowls
he said 'I've got a reputation
but even I pity these souls'
Met a devil at the shelter
and I asked who was to blame
he said he wouldn't point the finger
'in the end we share the shame'
Yeah, we all fall down, but we build our bridges
and we reach for the sky, but it's just too far
Yeah, we turn our backs on our burning bridges
We fly too high, and our wings fall apart
Met a goddess in a tavern
she was telling dirty jokes
she said 'it's no fun being holy
at least in hell they get to smoke'
Met a goddess in a tavern
and I asked was she ashamed
she said 'it doesn't make a difference
in the end it's just a game'
Yeah, we all fall down, but we build our bridges
and we reach for the sky, but it's just too far
Yeah, we turn our backs on our burning bridges
We fly too high, and our wings fall apart
Yeah, we all fall down, we all fall down
In the end, in the end, we all fall down
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Written November 6th, 2005
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hey there tumbleweed, this is bloody fantastic! thanks for gracing this contest and good luck, congrats on such a great write and keep it up. merry christmas and a happy new year!
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I really like that, I wish I could hear it set to music. I loved the mention of flying too high, now I have to go look up that greek myth about that because I can't remember the people's names in it. I think it might help if you put the things the characters in your poem are saying in quotation marks, such as "I've got a reputation
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wow that's powerful I'm not pagan...I don't believe in all that stuff, but really I love the way that you used holy things to create an image of sin. The world really is like that it is possible for us all to fall. Leading a moral life, according to morals that you believe in is important I believe. If we all were perfece the world would be no fun. I don't understand what to do when even if you go party, smoke whatever, how do you feel good about yourself ever if God's not holy then how can any of us have love, or worth...I'm just really thinking right now and writing, this is my true honest reaction to your poem, I might have gotten a little off topic.
This poem is very lyrical, it would be very good put to music, I'm no musican so I really don't know how all tha works. I like the repeating chorus. This is truly beautiful!!! -
Awesome... pure perfection!!
Awesome fantabulous lyrics... excellent!! Each stanza is a wonder and the music is in the words... Brava... "Yeah, we all fall down, but we build our bridges
and we reach for the sky, but it's just too far
Yeah, we turn our backs on our burning bridges
We fly too high, and our wings fall apart" Your metaphors are magnificent
Kudos!! Two thumbs up!! Excellent!! Wishing you much success in all of your endeavors!
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Very nice poem you have done well at capturing the readers attention and keeping them entranced with this piece
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Great poem. It is great how it twists the concepts of good and evil, into a more realistic perspective.
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Hey... that's really quite good.
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very well written
Very good poem. There is a lesson in your words. I love all of the comparisons you write of and they flow and rhyme is really well executed.
etherealforu
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that was really good. I liked how all the verses kinda sounded the same, but they changed a little bit. I picked up a beat on this right away. really good!
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Wow, that was awesome. I really loved the message, made me ponder some. The ryhming was also excellent, something I can never get the hang of so i appreciate when people do it well and it actually contributes to the strength of the poem...yus, lovely all round, i shall read it again x
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fantastic
omg that was funny i luved it i hope you win i won't even enter -
I very much like the development of this piece.... it actually reads quite a bit like song lyrics-- but isn't classified that way... if it wasn't meant to be lyrics, it easily could be... it would make a very nice folk-rock piece, maybe in the vein of Bob Dylan or The Wallflowers.
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