Dancing in the rain,
Untamed irrationality
Bold against the gale
Fatal for fatality
Strengthening with time
Envied by creator
I defined Purity
I defeated all predators
Careless innocence within me
Ran and sprinted wildly
On a journey to attain myself
Enjoyed mother caressing me mildly
Like a free soul, I breathed till now
With time, life changed the course
A step in the seemingly new world
And sadly I am no more a wild horse
Vichitra Joshi (J.Vic)
Author notes
Ok, I have heard this song ( but i havnt made this poem by getting inspired from it ) 
Wild Horse, here , i have taken as a child. I tried to keep a little balance between the horse and childhood, Balance between life and nature.
Lastly i mean to convey that we loose the wildness and careless-ness in us as we enter the new world. This new world is THAT phase of life where you are forced to dump the child in you and accept the responsibily and other social duties. I dont mean to say that these duties and responsibilities have no importance, but all i want to indicate through it is that it takes away the child in us, which we all adore to keep within ourself.
WE ALL ARE/HAVE BEEN WILD HORSES!!!!
Ok You didnt get it... kick me and i will be around to explain 
*hugs and kisses*
take cares and have anice time
*Miss Me*
- Vic
Written November 6th, 2005
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oye hoye meri dhanno........kya kick maari hai yaar
sorry if i had been beyond my limits....well you know the best part vic..you are truly creative....comparing childhood withh wild horse is nobody could ever think and you have brought out all this so wonderfully......damn proud of you
but i wonder why havnt you lost the innocence of the child......i know the credit goes to me but no need for all those thankies pankies.....anyway if you are really saying them thn you are welcome...!!!1
wonderful write vic.....and time to tell you my most fav line
i defined Purity
I defeated all predators
surely you managed to do that and thats y you are my such a lovely friend
waise you have given a chance to kick you out in your authors comments...i would love doing that..to kab bhej rahe ho mujhe ahmdbd ka ticket dear?????
chalo g time to leave now but wioll ne glued to your poems not by sight but by heart
love you
take care
anshu -
This piece really held my attention. It seems as though you have been writing forever!
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Beautiful
This is a really good poem, got a great meaning to it, the choice of words is wonderful too, the word flow is excellent, loved reading it, keep up the great work. -
yup
very emotional, i likes -
baie goed
I like it. And i owe u a favour. but seriously, i really like it! gonna check out some o ur others now -
*kick* *kick* explain then, darn you!! Haha just kidding! This was good, too, as all your poems are. It's sad, really, that I didn't get to read this b4.
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Oh well.
haha but I still get to kick you, though!!
But are you around to explain? *raises eyebrow* hmmmmmm... oh well.
*hugs and kisses*
your friend,
Lisi
P.S. I am moving on to comment attack summore!!
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Excellent Writing
This is so true. Responsibly becomes necessary; innocence is lost. ---Ellis -
Pretty kool poem
joanna. -
great
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this was beautiful... i applaud you for that it was good...
a bit short (which i happen to like) and sweet..
every now and then im still a wild Horse
your dear friend Amychu
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I love this..... it sounds like a couple horses that I own. LOL! India would be proud to know about this poem. You are right though. We all are a wild horse when we are born but as we grow older that horse is tamed and whipped into the person you become. But that horse lies within the whole time until it breaks free in the later of our years. The spirit, fire, and soul that they represent burns in us and beyond our death. I love this write and i hope to read more. I love you Vic honey.
Raina
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Excellent Work, Vic.
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What a moving, well-composed piece. You conveyed your feelings impressively through metaphor. Keep up the good work.
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I love this poem... great rite and I love wild horses... I love your poetry and I love well... you and you know that so I guessI ll talk to you later...
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i liked this poem mainly because you refered yourself to a wild horse
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BLACK BEAUTY
and you say yoyur poetry is not as good as mine!! Hell this was beautiful. You have a totally different style of writing...a style which i'm not very comfortable with.
what i love more is the content and subject matter...i can really identify with the feeling....am in that phase of growing up into an adult...and believe me it gets tougher to leave the child in you!!
Anyway wouldn't wanna get started on Emotions
Luv
VidZ -
So true great job,keep up the great work!!!!! : D :-)
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wonderfully worded, keep up the good work!!
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i loved it
wow hun, i really enjoyed this poem. you are very good at description and this has great imagery in it which is always important.
keep up the brilliant stuff hunni and thanks for posting, i really liked it
lotsa love Rozzy xxx -
I've Been writing lady, i've just kind of, erm, STOPPED, posting my work on here. Dont feel like posing anymore. I would love to fix this stupid feeling soon, if it pleases you.
Thank you very much, Lady, for reading giving my write some of your time , it's extremely kind of you.
take cares and have a nice time
- vic to LadyOfFate -
how sad you haven't written anything yet this year that I can see. please fix that. thanks.
wow this really describes wild horses. I have seen them before myself. They seem to be scared of humans, but they are so pretty and such. and like every wild animal you should never go near them for they may hurt you.
wonderful poem. have a wonderful day -
ok...i get it....its a wonderful write...yaar...the comparison is beautiful...ur thoughts and the words used are superb...i respect ur creativity...
Parth. -
hey dude...nice write...some parts i did not understand...bole t bouncer the..i'll read it again afterwards...
but thanks for sharing...
Dilton. -
Happy Epiphany Feast!
your writing shows a refined sensibility yet a strong spirit, of joy for living. don't let the horse in you be stifled from lack of exercise. take your horse to the country side to gambol and run. -
Excellent poem Vic! I'm glad I met you on the chatterbox. You paint excellent imagery of running, dashing wild horses in the fields and pen your own view on how they would think. Such creative imagination could only be done by a master poet such as you.
Excellent poem!
Riche
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Great
A very nice poem, i really liked it. Well done ^_^ -
awe so cute nicely done LOVA DOVA BOY thatnks SO MUCH for comeenting on my poems and great write babe urs truly ki
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whoa, this was amazing! Really liked it, it's kind of magical..
Loved it!
Maggie xx -
Wonderful write with a certain freshness about it which is always good. Brilliant vocabulary and the expression is awesome too.
I especially like the last stanza.
Love Julie x -
A real beaut!!! well done
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This is a wonderful poem.A good comparison between childhood and horse.Very well penned.
Shahrzad -
I understand this piece very well my Precious Friend. I, too have gond from mild to wild and back to semi-mild. This is a very impressive piece that I am so happy that I have taken the time to read. You continue to amaze me in so many ways and I am most blessed to be called your friend.
Lily ~* aka Bella -
short and sweeeeeet
VERY WELL DONE! Brief but wonderful, I love your diction here... Fatal for fatality, defeated predators...great! I would just take out the word "sadly" at the end, it's not necessary I wish I was a wild horse too!
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Very nicely done vic...wonderfully expressed. Best wishes in the contest.
Sam
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Up Rising Star In AP
My dear Son Vichitra Joshi,
Extremly glad to see your poetic sense & the positive message.
Please be kind enough to accept my 101 points as an appreciations .
You have proved your name as vichitra by giving us all the wonders in usage of word power blend it with poetic weave.
Now to applaud your inborn quality of poetic magic,
let me write A poem for you...
I write a poem for you today,
to get a place in your heart for ever
A poem that could tell you my love for you
I write my poem with emotion and affection
for you to understand my deep thoughts for you
A poem to love and a poem to understand its soul
A poem to enjoy and a poem to understand its happiness
A poem to think and a poem to understand its way of life
A poem to learn and a poem to understand its content
A poem to sing and a poem to understand its melody
A poem to cry and a poem to understand its sorrow
There are poems I have written but this is specially for you
The poem could tell you how important you are for me
There are words comes out freely from my mind to write poem
but there are no words to find my love for you
Those words can not missed as I miss your love today
Let me have all those words put in to my heart and
say I love to write a love poem for you
God bless you.
regards
subbu (purefriendship) -
this poem sings of a young mustang dancing and prancing and kicking his his up.. good job here..keep penning..Linda
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PERFECT 10!!!
wow...even if I take this poem literally, it will still take my breath away.What a way to describe a child...It was only now that I thought that children could be of substance like a horse.
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s a terrific write Vic and I think you have captured the essence of a wild horse very well in this. I've loved horses since I can remember It's one of the very few things that I havein common with my little girl (pity me come her teen years
). We both love horses and the spirit... even domesticated horses have a spirit unmatched by any other domestic animal
A terrific write. s and best wishes... ~genielassie~
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A very good write son with good rhyme and meter. The song is a personal favourite of mine and your perception of it a profound one, makes mumma think
did I hear you say "uh oh"? 
Thanks for sharing. Love you
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Truly Excellent!!!!!
Vic, We can always keep a part of that wild horse within us so that we never lose the child inside. I loved the spirit of the wild young stallion running free throughout this work. Your words created lovely imagery. I was very moved by this piece.
I have not been to see my friend in a while!!! I do have chocos for you and a big round of applause to go with it.
I still can't believe that you don't feel your work is good my friend, not when I see something of this nature. Keep writing. Love and blessings to you, today and always. Joyce
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steping into the unkown without the comferts of those we love around us, makes it hard to be who we truly are. Running free in vast feilds of emerald, or to soar high upon moutain tops, like the mighty eagle..in time all learn how to be wild again.
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Excellent!
at Vic! I'm giggling like the child inside of me. Oh, sweety I do get it and it's more serious than you play it out to be. I loved this piece, full of visions. You are very talented!
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sooooo goooood!
"Perfectly untamed, wild and free. That's how I want to be"
Awesome poem Vic! loved your analogical explanation of it, I think we should all hold on to that wild horse inside of us.
nice work with the form, I like the way it biulds up and hits an anticlimax in the last line and leaves the reader thinking.
*excuse me while I go outside to run around...and nobody can stop me! 
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beautiful write vic.....lovely poem and i hope you keep it up....good job!
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Wow! I actually think this is a really brilliant poem! I love the way it starts off kind of irrational in structure and ends up becoming more sturdy, reflecting the content, and the imagery is lovely... well done! tis brilliance xxx
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great job vic
i loved this, it was wonderfully and tastefully donw
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Nice job Vic
... I've come to hunt you down , well I wish you all the best for the contest, even if you don't win, you're already a winner by heart, you've achieved so much, writing this has achieved you alot. But I do love this poem Vic ... keep it up, and take it easy dear luv ya
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hey i like your poem is very nice well go to go bye ny friend see you latter have a nice day.
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WELL DONE
Well dear adorable Vic my son. This is a very clever and good effot. You did well.
Mumma Jan Loves Ya.
Hugs and kisses
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yes by natasha bedingfield .. i like that song.. its goody woody ..
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Wild horses! I've heard that song....atleast I've heard a song called that
I've heard the one by Natasha Bedingfield....is that the one you heard? Anyway...lol! I likes it! I hope you do well in the contest Good write & goodluck
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.. amazing! thats... wow vic, this is so well written and so creative, the meaning behind the poem is something we all must learn. great work thanks for entering and goodluck
Nikki
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