She sits among the black tipped roses,
In the garden of darkened hearts,
Watching the black tipped butterflies,
Hiding behind her shadowed glasses,
Surrounded by her silk black ballgown,
Staring into the darkened sky,
And down onto her dainty black shoes,
She sighs and dreams her life away,
Entwining her shiny black hair,
Around her fragile fingertips,
She deepens her breath and wonders,
Why do i exist in such a beautiful place?
A twinkle in her eye, a glimpse of a blade,
Forebodant but expectant,
In her darkened world she got her wish,
Colour in her black little paradise,
Dreaming of sitting among red red roses,
In a scarlet summer dress,
With strawberry blonde hair and crimson shoes,
But all is true, all is true, so true,
Surrounded now by the crimson love and hope,
That ran so deeply in her blood,
She lies in her romantic red paradise,
Bleeding until she dies, until she cries no more,
Until her dreams come true
Author notes
Written November 5th, 2005
A contest entry
- Faeries family group contest (members only) by Queen Maab.
500 points, ended March 23, 2006, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Aye-yi-i. Beautiful and mortifying at the same time.
Auntie Maab
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Oooooooo! This is so great zoe zoe! I lovers it muchly. It is me, yeah
lol. But seriously, it is a beautiful write. It is so eloquently penned, on a really origionaly subject. Gorgeously morbid imagery, and amazing metaphors. I really like it.
Keep the ink flowing sweetie
xoxox
-faerie-
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wow..great contrast of black and red..awesome imagery with it too..this poem is very dark, with deep thoughts to..great!
toobad u didnt read the rules..
S.C
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ooh I thought it was you for a sec there!...dont ask lol.
WOWEEÉ I love this (obviously lol), I think the fact that it doesnt rhyme added to the beauty of it, and it kinda makes it seem like it rhymes...if that makes sense? probably not but ah well
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anyway, amaaaazing stuff hun! loveyou lots
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vicci
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Woah hunni that is one AMAZING write! It's got some beautiful imagery, it's deep&dark, very interesting to read. I love the change in colours that you use to represent her death..very clever! Keep writing, you write so well,
Kate xxxxxxx
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This is pretty twisted . I like it though. I really like hoew it goes from balck to red. A very interesting piece. You have a creative mind.
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Wow this is amazing i love ur poem
It is rele descriptive and powerful
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This is a beautiful piece. I love the "transformation" from the girl with black hair surrounded by black-tipped roses into the girl with red hair surrounded by red roses. The whole thing was a lovely idea. Great write!
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hmmm... as u kno, i get confused extremely easily...im confused! lol o well gr8 write kkeep it up WRITE MORE!!! luvsya xxxx
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Amazing, I really love this poem. The imagery, the words, everything. Bravo, hon.
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woho, very good zoe. im impressed. i really do love it, it paints a picture so wel and i can imagine it. well done. love love love love dan x
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Beautifully twisted poem. I loved it. Good write. Favourite line: "That ran so deeply in her blood". Beautifully sick and grotesque.
Keep writing!
Blessed be
Tasha
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