Down, down, down
into the depths of darkness I go with her, then
Up, up, up soaring to the heavens above...
To the edge of the precipice of life we journey
and to the verge of self-destruction
wavering, reeling
time standing still
in the wonder of the fall that enthralls us
as we peer over the edge
to the horror below.
Then we turn... for there is something
worth another tomorrow;
yet, will tomorrow be as certain?
We remain suspended on a thread;
and that thread is love.
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Written November 5th, 2005
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WOW!! great write!!! awesome work! good luck in my contest!
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Funny how one of the most powerful forces in the universe, love, just also happens to be the most delicate as well. It can be strong and at the sametime weak. A thread merely connecting two people that can and hopefully will grow stronger with time. And no matter how strong the love is it is still so very delicate and the very thread of love can be snapped in an instant.
Another wonderful piece hun.
Blessings
Bel -
awsome work, it well describes love
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Daddy, this was amazing!
very well done!
I always love reading your works!
love yah
your dark angelic daughter
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This poem reminded me of a yo-yo, going up and down.... on a (love) thread.
Now when I think about it more.... it could also be about bungyjumping - a jump from the edge of a cliff and because of the elastic cord you are going up again.
Love can indeed be such a jump - you'll never be sure where it ends. Nicely done. Anna.
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Out of controll this love thing is...out of control! I still want to kill love..lol! Not for everyone..lol
Awesome poem! ~Angela -
Sorry,but that just popped into my head reading your talented thoughts Sir.I was hearing Neil Diamonds version,until now! Drat! Now I'm hearing a duo of both! I came back to reread this finely written work again and saw your message.Must appaud this again!~~~Suseann Won't let me.Catch ya on the downside in the morrow,if you get my drift."I shall return!"
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thanks, suseann! Now Joni Mitchell is stuck in my head... la la la singing "I really don't know love... at all...!"
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Rows and throws of angel hair,and ice cream canyons in the air.You've looked at love from both sides now.Is that the inspiration?~~~Suseann
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Thanks, purple... just to let you know, the source of this poem was from my tumultuous AP family experience! lol I mean ouch!
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thanks, sis, yes, how the heart is tugged when we least expect it!
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...and what a fragile thread love can be ey? ~sigh, beautiful write. Lovely write big bro.
~Lyrical
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WOW Ap dad!! This is really beautiful!!! You did a great job on this one!!! I really like it!!! Keep up the good work!!! Good luck in the contest!!!
Hugs,
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I like how you captured all the "ups and downs" of falling in love, and feeling like you are on the breeze of no control, like a kite in the wind
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Me Wbiro this is wonderful i like the shortness and eloquance of this piece very very well done i love the last two lines:
We are suspended on a thread,
and that thread is love.
well done xx Cheryl
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thank you much, oh one of purple hue...
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Nice powerful short piece you have here! You've stirred up quite a lot of emotion in this poem. Is the "rocky horror" part supposed to be a double-entendre? I think it works in the context you meant, and the movie... then again, maybe that's just me!
Anyhow, very good write here!
silly lavender
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