She's A warrior of painted darkness
A creature of great beauty
And holds a sword upon her back
Engraved in ivory carvings
As she spreads her wings
Of silver light
And for the very first time
Takes flight
Her arms stretched out
Among the clouds
she's soaring though the air
Closing her eyes
of blue and silver
Before all
Hell takes over
Author notes
I'v had a seen of this in my head for 3 days now.
A reacurring Dream..
Thier is now a part two 2 this poem and story please read: allpoetry.com/Poem/2082281
Written November 5th, 2005
A contest entry
- Fantasy Write by Qu33n J3z3b3ll.
500 points, ended August 12, 2006, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Express Yourself - Prewrites Allowed by Asylaarix.
450 points, ended November 27, 2006, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Love it! The imagery is amazing
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very detailed ... you did a wonderful job ... sometimes our best poetry comes from our dreams ... reoccuring mostly ... you describe her so well ... she is so beautiful ... good write hun ... keep on writing ... good luck in the contest
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WOW...really amazing written...very nice piece and wonderfully done!
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wow, short, simple, straight to the point. very nicely done. great poem.
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wonderful imagery and description. I envisaged her flying as beauty surrounds before darkened by all hell. Wonderful. Well done. Best of luck in my contest. Debs x
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Very well done. I love the edge at the end of it. The imagery is excellent
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Is there a part two? Base a story on her. You described her so well. Really, right a story on Silver Light.
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I.......................................................................
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LOVE..........................................................................
YOU
DOROTHY...........................
THIS....................................................................................
POEM
ROCKS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
CANT
WAIT
UNTIL
PART...................................................................................TWO.................................................
COMES
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Applaud
This is your overself that flies in the caverns of your subconscious and explores the realms of childhood fantasies. Excellent poem that is well worthy of applause.
georges. -
Wow this is probably one of my favorite poems ive read off here so far. very nicely done
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Enchanting
This was a powerful and enchanting poem.
The depth and imagination was incredible.
Your ability to create a story is very good.
You captivate your audience by your wonderful word usage.
You certainly have a lot of talent.
Please accept these corrections as nothing more than my way
of helping a fellow artist. You should fix the typo's because
they may take away from this splendid work. Here are the three
mispelled words I saw: Sored s/b sword. Vary s/b very and
Soring s/b soaring. Peace and blessings!
Edited on Nov 05, 2:44 p.m. because ''. -
its a very nice and beautiful fantasy poem
i for one adore fantasy lol
i really liked it and enjoyed reading it
but there a few spelling mistakes, in line 3 shouldn't the word "sored" be "SWORD"
and it is "Engraved" with an E and no hyphen
and you could add an ' to the "shes" to be "she's"
i know spelling mistakes are really i annoying.. i for one have to make them lol... we all do
anyways loved you poem..
and enjoyed reading it very much
keep on writing
Nooni -
Well done!
Great imagery invoked in this write! Wonderfully done! Much as i hate being nit-picky, a few typos distract from the otherwise exceptional beauty of this piece...
Sored=sword
Soring=soaring
Threw=through
aside from these minor distractions, it would be an A+! -
My wonderings too - no such creature as sored. She's soaring through the air, a few typos. Some good thoughts here, keep writing...
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Beautiful! Inspiring, i could envision her so clearly...you painted a picture so well here with your words, i could paint it easily...just a little note, since i would hate something as silly as a typo be a nuisance to this write, i believe "sored" is supposed to be "sword'? well done, my fellow Writer!
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