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Witch With The Emerald Eyes

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Maiden of the forces dark


Whose Emerald eyes see all


She calls upon the elements


To cause this soul to fall


 


Bedazzled by her beauty


I stared into her face


Bewitched by her enchantment


She caused my fall from grace


 


I cried towards the heavens


To save this soul of mine


Intoxicated by her power


I found our limbs entwined


 


And when she had her fill of me


She left me by the way


Still griped within the spell


I slept for most that day


 


And when I awoke this vixen had gone


But within me I had changed


For no other woman could satisfy


My life was rearranged


 


I have spent my life searching


For she who tantalized


To forfill my body's craving


For the witch with the Emerald eyes




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Written November 5th, 2005

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  • TheSimplestImbecile
    April 27, 2007

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    Very good

    Very good imagery, nice word choice, flow was a bit choppy and a few typos keep it from being really good.


  • Wulfareika
    April 27, 2007
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    Wow, pure passion and want mixed with sadness and a feeling of betrayal too. A powerful write indeed. I really loved it. The layout of it and background as well go extremely well with it and the picture is pretty much described completely in the poem. A great write


  • Alan D Taylor
    November 15, 2005
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    Yep, sad but true - I met this witch also.

    Write on


  • josh-13
    November 14, 2005
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    Wow, this reminds me way too much of my X girlfriend, lol. THis was an awesome write, YOu did a good job with the flow, and it's just fit together Nice, I loved it, it's worthy of my applaud.


  • Lencio Rodrigues
    November 12, 2005
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    This is one amazing page, beautiful layout, and the write is truly amazing. when did this dark side started coming lol!!! . and you are certainly good at it. Yes I think you hav egiven celticmoon the best!!!

    Well done,
    Love and light,
    Lencio

    PS: Nice, really nice piece!!! Creative!


  • Gentle Bear
    November 11, 2005
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    Wow! This is very good and is absolutely perfect for the picture which your words bring to life. Very well done indeed and good luck in the contest!
    Edited on Nov 11, 11:36 p.m. because ''.


  • Tawni Risley silver member
    November 9, 2005
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    anotherhit!

    I love the descrption on this, and I love the intensity of it. Very nice. You should make thins into an audio, Paul meeh boy! Um..man...Haha! Very nice. I liked how you made Emerald emerald! Hahahah! Very nice work!

    Tawni


  • heartnsoul
    November 6, 2005
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    excellent !!

    Paul,
    You live up to your name! Not only in your poetic prowess, but your art is astounding. I absolutely love how you Highlighted Emerald! Genius my friend, pure genius! It does pull you in. Witch or no witch, I'd give my eye teeth to look like that! She's stunning! Your imagination or someone elses?
    Good luck in the contest!
    ~Michelle~

  • Mrs. Dumas silver member
    November 6, 2005
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    Oh wow Paul! You have amazed me yet again. Your work and the pictures you find are truly wonderful. You write so well to go along with the picture. I did notice a few typos, very minor but still there, that you may want to fix.

    "And when I a woke this vixen had gone"
    The words a woke should be one word (awoke)
    "But with in me I had changed"
    The words with in should be one word as well (within)

    Other than that, great job! Best of luck in the contest!

    Much Love
    Jess


  • fathom me
    November 6, 2005
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    Hi! Best of luck in the contest~
    A short interesting ride! Thank you

  • annie
    November 5, 2005
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    great poem

    You are such a great storyteller, in all you write you bring me into the story. I am always in wonder reading your work you always have me sitting on the edge of my seat, *smile*


  • LovinCharmer gold member
    November 5, 2005
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    Outstanding poem and equally great graphics. I love the way you made your words flow, and caused it to border on the erotic with taste. I did notice one thing that you might want to edit or correct.The next to last sentence you have for fill, If it were I, I would put (fulfill)


  • wbiro gold member
    November 5, 2005
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    Hmmm... I was trying to see where the 'Emerald' link went for about twenty minutes, but my mouse must be defective... lol


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    November 5, 2005
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    A very nice ,gentle poem of the owl and his princess, it describes the picture so well.. good job..Linda


  • Celticmoon
    November 5, 2005
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    WOW!
    I am impressed, very impressed!
    You have created a wonderful tale to go along with this picture. Though this picture maybe quite enchanting by itself, you took it to the next level and brought it to life. Your talent most definately proceeds you. Also, I love the title

    I have only one question.....
    How in the world would you know to describe me? You barely know me


    Blessings
    celticmoon

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