Her trembling form calms under his authority
His gentle touch melting her with every embrace
He adorns her with leather, replacing the lace
Her face shining with an aura of purity
All dolled up in violet leather, looking pretty
Innocence shining in her eyes as he strokes her face
Her trembling form calms under his authority
His gentle touch melting her with every embrace
He trains her into an obedient Pet leniently
A lovely girl fit for any man's tastes
He claims her as his own, with a growl just in case
His lap is her only place in the entire city
Her trembling form calms under his authority...
Author notes
Ahaha...ANOTHER Sharazon/Kira!
Sharazon is copyrighted to Opaque Beauty.
I think she's gotten me COMPLETELY obsessed with this form. There can't be any other explanation. o o;
Rondel: ABba abAB abbaA rhyme scheme.
The last stanza used to be:
He trains her into an obedient Pet, so fitting
A lovely girl fit for any man's tastes
He claims her as his own, with a growl just in case
Making sure his lap is the only place she's sitting
Her trembling form calms under his authority...
BUT...then I found a better way to rhyme it. Which do you people like better?
Written November 4th, 2005
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A contest entry
- AnY tHiNg U LiKe by pimp daddy satin.
300 points, ended November 10, 2005, 33 entries
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What did you think
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This is one of my favorites. As for the weekend...I had an extra long one with Friday off. I hope you have more enjoyable weekends.
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cool, this is a nice way to end the weekend. I only wish the weekend could last a lot longer, but then again I do need to pay the bills
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I like it how it is now. They're both great but I love the word leniently and city together. So...
And you ARE TOTALLY OBSSESSED WOMAN! OB-SE-E-E-ESSSSSSSED.
This is really a brilliant poem Rose. And you're fantastic at Rondels too. Woo hoo! Zon and Kira!!!!
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You'll probably see a lot more of these from me, so maybe.
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Yeah. ^_^ Perhaps i'll grow more used to Rondels and be able to appreciate them more. ^_^
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I love how we're both obsessed with this concept. It makes me all happy. As for the actual form...they're quite fun. o o; I don't think I was ever quite good with free form...I rarely write it for some reason. But I really like free form too...It's weird. I wanna write more of it sometime. Glad you liked the concept and stuffs. <3
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I skimmed through this earlier, but i didn't have time to comment. Thank you for linking me because it reminded me to come back. ^_^
I love the concept, you know i do. I'm not quite fond of the form, though. Rondel, something new to me. Then again, i'm also straying away from rhyming poems too. So,.. i don't know. It was good though, don't get me wrong. ^_^ -
YES! You just have a way with getting me OBSSESSED with, like...EVERYTHING! Aaaand...yes...I thought the one I'm using now rhymed better too. It's better for the foooorm. Mmhm.
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*Really, really, REALLLYYYYY big evil laugh of... Evilness!* I've gotten you obsessedededed!
With not ONLY Zon, but Rondels ABOUT him, as well! *Giggle; point.* Silly.. Uhh.. Rose Mentor, Lesbian Affair, PERSON!
Mm'hmm'; I personally love both of the last stanzas, but for the sake of being "so-fist-i-cate-ed", I shall sayyyy... Thaaaatttt... The one that you're using now sounds better. ^ ^; Fitting, sitting and authority do have a strange kinda rhyme thing.. But leniantly, city, and authority sound better.. 'Least in my mind. o o; -
Thank you. I'm glad you liked it.
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awww. i love this. its so cute and reminds me of my baby. well cute
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