Reddened cheeks and puffy eyes
Stuffy nose and tears I cry
Bloody hands and ripped up wrists
Pretty cloth all crimson kissed
Darkness comes and vision fades
Before me now, Hell is laid
Crimson red and fire a glow
It opens up and starts to grow
The purest evil and hatred lasts
Showing me my tortured past
The truest evil resides in man
Tearing apart true Love's plan
Author notes
Written November 4th, 2005
Contest: It seems to be a combo of one and five.
In a list
A contest entry
- Anything and Everything by Welcome-To-Hell.
700 points, ended February 16, 2007, 54 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I want to feel your emotion by Darkened Seraph.
500 points, ended March 14, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - pif - Enter your best quickie pre-write by tara wilson.
1200 points, ended September 20, 2007, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Very sad, I have had many entries like this into the contest, I hope poetry helps you work through these feelings of suicide as it is better to write about it than act it out
Thank you for this entry
As for the poem, you have EXCELLENT rhythm and rhyme in this, and yes, the truest evil does reside in man - if that is how we choose to see it
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wow, this is fantastic, yet so painful, i hope you never actually felt like this, its soo dark and shows soo many emotions, i love the choice of words, and it seems to flow really well, i can feel the sadness of depression in the poem, the title works well with the poem too, a fantastic write well done
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Wow that is very painful and wonderfully penned this is a great write with awesome flow excellent write best of luck in the contest
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wow this is really good...i know how you feel...its definately a relatable piece to me and to others..the whole poem flowed together perfectly....So much said in a few lines...well great job and again good luck to you in my contest...Thanks for entering..
~~~Vampireblood~~~ -
OMG....this was an absolutly BEAUTIFUL write. i loved how it flowed so smoothly together and it was just perfect!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Spify poem.
Quite the eye catcher. I must say though the ending was superb.
The whole true loves plan.
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Thanks... I wanted to write something just a little different from my other dark poems and I think I may have succeeded with thi one
~Ashleigh -
great rythme and rhyme, this poem flows very nicely. VEry well expressed emotions.
tasha -
thanks
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good job
this is a good poem, it shows a lot of emotion, I liked it a lot good job.
Kortney -
Great write... A powerful well expressed piece
Thanks for entering, Goodluck.
Best Wishes
(¯`•.Tracey.•´¯)
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thanks
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this was really good!!! i love it!!!
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thanks.
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Thanks Kiki... I can't take all the credit... some of it goes to my wonderful bf, Losing all sanity, who loves me unconditionally and is trying to help me escape my father. Thanks for the comment.
~Ashleigh
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awsomes:)
wow, tingles down my spine. this is just so dark and emotional. i loved this just so much. loved it. keep it up.
love britt. -
Awesome!
OoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOo, this is very very kewl! I loved your rhyming. Gosh, I've been trying to rhyme for years now, and it's never been as good as this! Gerrr~8 job! {Like alwayz!}
KiKi
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Aww thanks dear...and good job to your boy friend...he certainly loves YOU my dear...truly does. GROUP HUG!!!!!! 
!!!!!!
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sweetnessssss
wow, talk about darkness
i love this poem and how you expressed so much emotion in such a short poem....i usually dont like short poems but this was straight to the point
nice job~!
<3 Daisy -
Thank you Grampy. Very strong words from a strong man as yourself. I don't deserve all of the credit though, my boyfriend helped me a lot with this... and he tried his best at rhyming( it's not one of his best qualities in poetry), but his poems are perfect the way they are.
~Ashleigh s and 
es for the truest form of MY TEDDY BEAR!!!! Lol.
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thank you... i had a little help from my bf
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thanks.
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Brilliant!
Very painful to read, but a masterful poem. You are rapidly becoming an extraordinary writer. "The truest evil resides in man." I agree. But I also believe if the desire to keep the spirit alive and well is present, evil cowers in fear.
I should know. I have seen Evil's face.
Thanks for always TRYING to be strong. If you continue, you will see VICTORY! 
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great poem.i love the rhyming.
see ya-
amanda k. -
really great! you do a lovely job rhyming, it doesnt sound forced or anything. great job!!
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