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Scared no more

Dark ground
Footsteps Pound
hide,
be meek
then a piercing shriek...
overpowered
so it cowered
curl up tight
so it wont bite
start to run
then hear a gun
fall to the floor
.......................
scared no more.....




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Written November 4th, 2005

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  • olddrivelandrubbish
    November 24, 2005
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    mmmm middleing

    reminds me of one of mine... the ceaseless nialism
    Full stop...
    Strangely hard to attain.
    Put a gun to my brain.
    Run me down with a train...
    Dont create me again!
    FULL STOP.


  • good4nufin
    November 5, 2005
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    So strong, Ashes is right it paints a real image for readers to see, very sad tho i dont like thinkin of anyone ending that way.

    Troy xoxo

  • Ashes of a Phoenix
    November 4, 2005
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    awesome

    nice work.. like the ending... brings it all together, short, yet it paints the reader an image to see... love ya work