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Lipstick

Manipulation,
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   R
    I
     P
      P
       I
        N
         G
           off your fingers.
  Twisting my heart,
     into your tangled mess of SEX.
         Crystal blue whispers,
          cold as ice on my neck,
        yet burning into my eyes.
   Worthless "I love yous",
     oh-so wasted on your deaf ears,
        but you've always liked
           to smear my lipstick.
       

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it sucks... it all sucks..
Written November 3rd, 2005

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  • DreamingMoon
    November 9, 2005
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    I like it but i love the line"Crystal blue whispers cold as ice on my neck" good write


  • LemonDropAngel
    November 5, 2005
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    great job babe i love it it doesnt suck at all


  • mystic oceania
    November 5, 2005
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    shakes head...you're crazy hun, this doesn't suck, i love it.
    ~mystic


  • mysticlabyrinth
    November 4, 2005
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    oh so much emotion! i LOVE it!


  • Dani911
    November 4, 2005
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    Yead I agree with everyone one else this poem doesn't suck. I liked it. Good job.


  • darkvixenpoet
    November 3, 2005
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    I like this poem a lot! It so does not suck! I love the resentment I feel..and the last line is my favorite. Very vivid, and, i hate to be a parrot, but striking. very well done.

  • foundashoeimp
    November 3, 2005
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    Very striking. Format is great; i agree with above comment. Also like how you didn't make it a mile long--the shortness gives it more emphasis. Nice work.

  • EchoesofSilence
    November 3, 2005
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    If by "it sucks... it all sucks" you are talking about the poem... then I disagree. However, if that's the case, you need to be more clear. If you don't like it, perhaps you shouldn't even bother posting it. If, you mean it by the situation... then I can understand a bit more. Being used in such a manner is heartbreak of the worst kind. There is nothing worse. I do however really like how you played it out in this piece. The format works wonders, and ties the reader emotionally inside, as well as gives a physical image of the subject. Great job on the poem. Thanks for sharing.

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