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The Lovers (1)

I lay my innocent eyes upon your gentle face,
You look so beautiful, so true.
Delving into truth in your deep eyes i trace,
I believe every word from you.

You hold me close, softly kissing me,
Enclosed in your darkened room.
We long for our nights together spent so free,
Encrypted in our lovers tomb.



Author notes

a poem with sonnet elements ( i havn't managed to work out the iambic pentameter for it yet) inspired by romeo and juliet x. .x
Written November 3rd, 2005

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  • November 22, 2005
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    WOW thats amazing! i luv the words u used, they rele paint a picture xx


  • AmethystRose
    November 5, 2005
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    Beautiful and enchanting, this is really sweet. Well worded with a short and powerful structure. A lovely poem.
    Keep at it hun
    xxxxxx


  • C h e l s e a
    November 4, 2005
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    B*E*A*UTIFULE!!!

    i love it!! B*E*A*UTIFUL!!! i truely love it, so sweet, short and lovely!!
    with love,
    *Chels*

  • Irishstamp
    November 3, 2005
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    I, at first, believed that there was something missing. I believed that you needed to add more; two stanzas were not enough...

    But no, that is not true

    What you have written is indeed wonderful and does not need to be changed.