Thrusting steadily, he watched her eyes widen in surprise. He knew this was her first time. He had frankly expected more trouble with her, but was pleased that she caught on so quickly.
Taking her hand, he guided it to where it would be most beneficial. Watching her ministration carefully, Haldir kept her at the task. Only upon completion would satisfaction reign. He waited patiently for her to hit a rhythm. Sighing in relief as she finished, he brushed a curl from her damp forehead.
“Very well done, Eléria,” he said.
“Can we plant more flowers tomorrow, Ada?” she asked.
©2005 rous
Author notes
Just another in my growning series of drabbles set in Ela's world. I hope this one did not disappoint too badly.
"Ada" is Sindaran for father, or more acurately daddy.
This was an entry for the contest "And What Were You Thinking?" by Dragon Tamer
Did not win.
Written November 3rd, 2005
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I have one that you might enjoy,
it is a bit more serious, but nevertheless holds one's attention,
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The Big- bang theory!!
she pulled it out
gently from between
the gap in
the white drawers
wrapping her fingers
around it in a tight grip
holding it snugly
in her hand
as she gazed at it
caressing the
length of it
she boldly stared at the tip
running her finger over
the hole and closing her eyes
worried it might explode
in her hand without warning
she gingerly slid her finger
around and under and over
it's most curved part
lowering her head she slid it
into her mouth several inches
closing her lips
as it entered
she tasted it's
metallic tang
a bit of warm oil
caressed her tongue
and she swallowed it
she trembled as she slid it
all the way in
and held it there
the excitement and
fear was palpable
she knew what was to come
and was sure the end was near
suddenly she pulled
down hard on it
near where she gripped it
only to hear a loud
and dissapointing
click in response
she pulled harder
five more times
in desperation and still
found no satisfaction
removing it from her mouth
she realized the gun was empty
her husband knowing she was
despondent over her recent loss
of a baby they had sired
in a moment of heated passion
had removed all the bullets
and put them somewhere safe
she placed the gun back
in the white drawers and sighed
slipping under the sheets
she chased a dreamless sleep
and lived to see another day
and three more lovely children
as she traveled forward
down the road that had
led her past her
route 44 magnum to hell
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Oh, yeah! That is awesome. Is it in your poems and stories? If not, it should be. And, yes, the twist is just as delicious, although, with the warning, I knew it was not what it appeared to be.
Thank you for sharing.
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Oh, I plan on it! And, I love playing with someone's mind. It is just that sometimes it gets lonely. LOL
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By all means... keep the twist, and all its makings. It creates something unique and intriguing. And, if it plays with ones mind as it should, shouldn't the twist itself be a little puzzling? I mean, I doubt it should be expected.
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Yep, that is my trouble, I like the twists. There are several more in my lists. My drabbles tend to turn back on themselves. Keep life from getting boring. Apparently, I may twist a bit too much, to see one of the reviews. I will have to work on that. LOL
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This indeed was a total play on words. Except, you were able to toy with my mind as well. Write on.
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It is still puzzling?
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well, you had me going then, I was puzzled as to the outcome. well done good luck in contest
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Thank you, Timebot, for reading and commenting. Just a little twisted humour from the dark recesses of my mind.
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Good. I am glad you liked it. I have a few more. This is the way most of my "adult" writings end up. I am not a good smut writer. I try, but...there it is. Thank you for reading and commenting.
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This had me going right till the end!Very well done.It did bring back memories of planting tomatoes every year...lol very good misleading tale.Thank you for entering this one in the contest.I enjoyed this twisted plot.
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