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I Love My New Sis

 


I Love my new sister
so very sweet, why
she really makes my life much more whole and complete.
She wants a love poem written for her,
so be it. I can do it,
and though I’m her AP brother,
I’ll pretend I’m all, I'll pretend I'm her lover!

You see,
only pure love can do the job
and under the moon 
my love sure is strong!

Two kindred spirits are her and I...


 Left in the rain out under the sky,
   from the dark shadows
   our voices take flight
   on every new joy of each new day and night.



So we hurl yesterday’s sorrows
onto dark passing clouds
and together, catch much brighter and sunnier tomorrows!

 

 

 

 

Author notes

hmmm... lol I'm not so sure about the form... but it does have an official term thanks to my AP daughter below: the 'likeanacrostic'. but there is no doubt it is a sappy love poem, and for my new AP sis... guess who? (the poem reveals it...) answer below...









'Lyrical Soul'
Written November 2nd, 2005

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  • Gogetalife
    November 6, 2005
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    Wonderful poem for sweet lady and poet here in ap..I like your creativity Wayne as usual..you always come with new inspiring ideas and forms..that's great..i love it..it was so cute..great work my friend


  • wbiro gold member
    November 3, 2005
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    Thank you, Wolf of Night, sounds like you've known Robin a lot longer than I have! Yes, the romance part was easy! the rhyming however... lol I explained that forced rhyme and a light heart were made for each other!


  • Wolf of Night
    November 3, 2005
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    Beautiful piece to a Beautiful Poet and Woman! I give you credit this is very romantic and well written. I did not see forced rhyme but I think most of those people that say it is forced are just jealous because they can not write in rhyme. You did a wonderful job here for a very dear person who can set the sunset ablaze with the simple whisper of her words Great JOB I APPLAUDE YOU!


  • Celticmoon
    November 3, 2005
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    Another very well written and expressed piece of loving poetry,
    You my dear have a heart of gold! And trust me it surely shows.
    You have more love in you than most people give or receive in a lifetime. Words of wonder from your heart to your pen to paper and then to the hearts of those you so love dearly. A beautiful gift for one to treasure always





    Blessings
    Bel


  • vampira1665 silver member
    November 3, 2005
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    Well that was very nicely done dear. And I love the background.

    Hugs and bites, Your Partner in Death

  • JD Elix
    November 3, 2005
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    cool

    DIFFERENT


  • Anna Emkah
    November 3, 2005
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    Thanks Wayne for your reply. I think I understand what you mean. I will have a look at the "Iceman" poem now. Anna.

  • wbiro gold member
    November 3, 2005
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    an applause for your sigh and your simple love, sis!


  • wbiro gold member
    November 3, 2005
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    Anna! Hello, and the answer to your question? I have discovered that forced rhyme and a light heart are made for each other! It's only when a work becomes 'serious' that forced rhyme becomes a problem! Now as for 'exact' rhyming- you dont' need that, either, as long as you have good 'rhythm'! A perfect example would be my poem just before this one, the 'Iceman' poem. I have very few words that rhyme in that one, but with excellent rhythm the reader doesn't even notice the words do not rhyme! I hope all this helps!


  • wbiro gold member
    November 3, 2005
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    thanks, my brightest angel, I think you've invented a new poetry term- the 'linkanacrostic'!


  • SexyAngel0418
    November 3, 2005
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    WOW... This is an awesome poem!!! It's kinda like an acrostic!!! I really like it!!! Great job!!!

    Hugs,
    Your brightest angel


  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    November 3, 2005
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    Of course, I ran as fast as I could and added this to my author's page. Thank you


  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    November 3, 2005
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    Kisses and teardrops overflow on this page! How sweet is THIS? Oh so so sweet. Thank you so much big brother for this virtual hug in such sweet words. ~sigh. I love you too!

    Your sister,

    ~Lyrical
    Edited on Nov 03, 4:21 because ''.


  • Anna Emkah
    November 3, 2005
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    This is a very nice poem, for a nice lady too no doubt. I do not know 'Lyrical Soul' that well, only participated in one of her contests.

    For you Wayne I have a question (and others may tell me too what they think of it - and you may delete all this when you do not like it), but why is it, you think, that YOU are praised by everybody about poems like this, while people attack me when I have only one word wrong, which does (according to them) not rhyme perfectly? For instance: word - sword. I know the pronounciation is different, but not that much. Do I have a good rhyme word than I am accused of having used forced rhymne. Fortunately, I am getting better with rhyming lately, for I know the difference in pronounciation now, but still I wonder, why you can write this kind of poems without getting any negative comment, just praise, while I ...... People must LOVE you very much Wayne. And so do I, but....

    Anna.
    Edited on Nov 05, 11:20 because 'changed it'.


  • Night Hope gold member
    November 3, 2005
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    Methinks Robin will be most pleased, Wayne...ya did her justice with your lovely words...well done, Poet... Wanda

  • wbiro gold member
    November 3, 2005
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    Thank you, my Grand Aunt suseann!


  • suseann
    November 2, 2005
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    I'm sure about the form.Sure it was good! Lots of purdy words and thought went into this.I think.HA! No it was great my nefew.You did it justice.~~~Suseann
    Edited on Nov 03 because ''.

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