How do you like it here in Hell with me?
You'd think by now, I would be numb,
but the pain intensifies.
Oh, how he lied.
and I wish I would have died.
Here in Hell,
It won't go away.
The pain is too real.
I'm too exhausted to feel.
And I just won't heal.
Life in Hell,
Isn't it grand?
I'm dying everyday,
He broke me in every way,
The pain is here to stay.
How do you like it here in Hell with me?
You'd think by now I'd be numb....
Author notes
Please be honest! Thanks.
Written November 2nd, 2005
A contest entry
- Anything you want to write by tigerlily185.
300 points, ended November 5, 2005, 10 entries
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Wow that's really good, such nice flow and rhyme scheme. But ahh...where'd this come from? Why is my chippy Wittershmidten so sad? and is this "he" real? Do I need to castrate "him", because it would be a joy. E-mail me if you don't see me online when you read this k?
props on the poem miss and love -
ok this is a really good poem.... you do need to change is to its in verse 3 line 2 however... it is a awesome poem and i really like it!! good luck!!!
~katie~ -
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Loved this piece. Heartbreak always feels like your burning in the pit of fire. Verse 3 line 2 "Isn't is grand?" Should "is" be "it"? Excellent work I will have to go read more of your work. Thanks for sharing your talent.
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