Hand in hand,
They walk across the cold sand.
Looking into each others eyes,
She soon begins to cry,
For they must say good-bye.
He’s going off to war,
She doesn’t know anymore.
He doesn’t know when he’ll be back,
For tomorrow, he’s off to Iraq.
She puts on a brave face,
Knowing she must fill his place.
Her fear shows,
As she asks, “Must you go?”
He holds her tight,
And sweetly whispers, “It’ll be alright.”
“I’ll be home before you know it.”
“It’s only for a little bit.”
Her tears begin again,
As darkness closes in.
He leaves at dawn,
So they walk on,
Knowing every step they take,
Is another step towards his fate.
Author notes
Written November 2nd, 2005
A contest entry
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Ooooo.... That's a sad poem... I liked this though... it was good... not great, but good... thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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OMG this is a really nice piece...good luck in the contest!
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this is a really nice piece best of luck to you in the contest
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Nicely written, I enjoyed your last lines: "Knowing every step they take, Is another step towards his fate."Thank you for the entry. -N
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This doesn't seem fit the contest criteria. If you would like to tell me how it does fit please tell me before I've finished judging otherwise yours will not be judged.
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I loved this poem, i loved the chosen background and I think this is one of the best i've read..it brought a tear to my eye..than ufor sharing this peice....keep up the good wrk
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awww!! this is so sad.. im really sorry if one of your lovers is going off to war or your family or anyone you know.. i know how that goes.. it has happened to me too. and one of them actaully has......... but yeah.. i didnt know him all to well.. but you did a really great write and its really sad... i love it though great work.. and keep it up!!!
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thanx
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How sad, so emotional a write. Easy to read and understand. Well written.
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thanx...i've had a couple of close friend leave so yeah. thanx
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Aww.. this made me tear a bit.. I have had a friend leave me and go off to war so I know how this feels.. Great poem!
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