As I slide the blade
across my skin
it feels as if a huge weight has been lifted
but it doesn't last for long
it soon comes back
so I cut again and again
hoping to drive the feelings away
As I sit there surrounded by the blood
I put the blade to my artery
and think how easy it would be
to just end it all right there
but images of my best friends appear
Brandie, Chad, Jessica, Kimmy, and Ashley
I realize how much I would miss them
I put the blade down
and sink to the floor crying
not really knowing what to do
wanting to die
yet wanting to live at the same time
Author notes
um, just something that happened not long ago but yea.
Written November 1st, 2005
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Great poem I could feel feel it, having been in that place so many times before. The faces and memories and thinking about the ones you love can do so much. I love your writing let it all out. -
very sad poem, but i loved it... my friends help me survive too. keep em close to u, they will help u make it through i know my friends have.... hang in there
~Darksoul216 -
I realy like the words you used.It was a little short but not too short. I think so many people can relate to this...make sure you keep thoose friends that you have close to you.
-Sasha
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That was very good, some many people know how you feel, the thing with me is I am not ready to see people cry over me.
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hey hailey that was good *hugs* its ok just dont cut yourself you can always talk to me if you need to ok
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Wow,
This was freaking amazing.
I mean I have been in this situation before...
You explained it so well....
I have done this before,
but then suddenly images of your closest people
pop into your head...
and you just can bring yourself to do it.
Muchlove
Donna Goodjob -
i really like this....it sounds alot like what im feeling like right now....i love the emotion in it....thanks for writing it.....i kno how u feel....i would miss a few people but yet at the same time still wanting to not go on, just wanting to die...wel
stay cool and stay up
much love
Lacey -
YAY you came up with a title... I don't like the subject either bt it is better to get the feelings out..... i Broke up with Thomas well ill talk to you later
Ashley -
You know how I feel about the subject matter of this, but it's better to let things out instead of keeping it all bottled up inside.
Love ya!
Mom -
Very good letting your emotions show. The flow could use a little work, but on the whole, nice job
And remember, there's always something to live for, all you have to do is find it, don't ever give up on the most precious thing. . . Your life! Once you give it up, you can never get it back.
~Kat
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