Standing above,
looking down
on a field
of quilted greens, that was
not there a hundred years before
but probably will be a hundred years more.
Standing staring at greens, I realise
the world is not quite as it seems:
living for sport and all things bought;
I really couldn't care if you
didn't have change to spare
-It shouldn't have come down to that.
So go about your business on
this hot summer's day, flirting and chasing
all the birds away. A symbol of
inheritance as capitalism bends
and nobody, not even you or I,
saw the message that it sent before
we all gave in.
Walking across the quilt getting
stuck between the cotton, I see
that what's important is not all
but forgotten. Some are rising up
but are mouldy around their stalks;
others are turning rotten-
brushing the wind with their ends,
realising too late-
being burned to make amends.
Releasing myself from the cotton thread
I take back to walk the field
realising that nothing but everything
has truly been revealed.
Tripping over another pulled thread
I land face first in the mess
staggering to knees, not quite
making it to stand. Suddenly
I realise that this square,
this stark piece of veld,
this corner of the quilt
is my impact on the world.
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Author notes
SPEAK UP! I can't hear you...
Written November 1st, 2005
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green fields of commercialism.
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I was puzzled by the "quilt of greens" phrase. What sort of greens are you talking about? Ordinary fields? Farmers' fields? Sports pitches? Obviously not vegetable patches but..................
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This was written quite well!!I enjoyed full of depth and flowed quite nicely, your imagery was well-detailed and good personification I enjoyed these lines:
A symbol of
inheritance as capitalism bends
and nobody, not even you or I,
saw the message that it sent before
we all gave in.
great lines, very complex tone, and your composition was great!
Ruth
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haaa- that's disgusting! I don't know how I did that! thanks for pointing it out!
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Creative.
This has some very good places in it. "It shouldn't of come down to that," is improper grammer. It should read: "It shouldn't HAVE..... Things like that bother me. I like the idea and feel of the poem, though. And, it is creative and nice. Shancy.
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