One drop of rain from downy vapor birthed
Did crash abrupt upon a mountain’s top,
Once draped with icy winter, now unearthed,
And mingled swift with others of its crop.
It trickled over moss and painted stones,
Eluding gnarled roots of evergreens
That licked and lost despite their raspy moans,
And tumbled swift into the greater streams.
Then, rushing blind, a river bid it merge
To etch a bleeding gash upon the land,
And weather weeping wounds amidst the surge,
And render rounded rocks into the sand.
When finally it met the gentle sea:
In vapors, back to heaven, gratefully.
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Written October 31st, 2005
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Ah, well, I write long entries for two reasons, because I figure that people will appreciate a comment that doesn't just say great job and because I need the points (just joined a couple of weeks ago). I thought you had a really good poem going there. The cycle of water is well known to everyone and has great crowd appeal (though I'm hoping your poems aren't for entertaining the masses). It was very well written and very visual. Sure you get that generallity alot. But, nonetheless, its nice to read something so familiar but portrayed so beautifully. I really enjoyed it.
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the point of veiw is awesome, you feel like the drop, really cool. its written very well also. good job!
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This poem is so cool! Great wording;the imagery is so clear.. loved how you wrote it,good idea,very creative,interesting/enjoyable to read!
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I really liked this, I love the nature, and you portrayed this really good. Nice job, and keep it up.
~Fallen
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its good i cant write sonnets and i dont know why so im giving you credit
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very well structured sonnet (somethign that one does not find to often on AP) it has somethign that a classical sonnet would not really deal with. It is well written, great write
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