No ropes are these, my hands, to bind the wind,
To part unyielding currents from herself,
Or fix my earthbound breath and so defend:
As fallen leaves on wind, I've lost myself.
Forever winds have played and danced the weather;
What stormy clouds e'er reigned while wind said No?
What birds have soared the air though broad of feather,
Unless beneath spread wings, wind bore them so?
Your love is as the wind -- it blows me over;
It sweeps me through and carries me along
To where I may not lay until life's over.
Alone, I'll struggle nothing but hold on.
A bird with broken wings taught me to fly
On love as hers -- the wind that fills my sky.
-October 31, 2005
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[English Sonnet]
Option 1
Written October 31st, 2005
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well David I liked the verbage and imagary this sonnet produced with imaginative phrases and metaphors over is such a ough word to not force when writing yet I also dont like rhyming the same word with itself you write structured poetry so much better than this newbie does and havent a clue what I would do different enjoyed the read
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Your skill with phrase (as well as form) has made me an avid follower.
The metaphors here are worked beautifully. I admire the creative rhyme play throughout and the added stresses in the 2nd stanza. A striking couplet. -
Good job. I like most of the stanzas the concluding couplet is great.
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I enjoyed this poem a lot, no one really writes this way any more. I'm glad that you are good at it. You had good expressions of the over all feeling and It just came of to me as shakespeare, but in your own personal way. Great job, I'll defently be reading more of yours.
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This was a sweet poem
Good luck to you
Thanks for entering my contest
Keep up the good work
Hannah
(Chatterbox005)
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Beautiful job! I love poems on love and I adore nature so this blew me away. HeHe! You are, without a doubt, a very talented poet. I thank you for sharing this with me. Remarkable job and good luck.
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I have heard that song mentioned before but I don't know it. I should probably look it up since so many people keep talking about it. Thanks for your coments.
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Oh this is so beautiful . Like the song wind beneath my wings but your own original version and just as beautiful well done .
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I Love It
This is beautiful, touching deep love, it is so sweet
A well written poem.
I love it , good luck and keep writing.
Kisses; Sue
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