Guardian of the temples, cold and dark he looms
Protector of Egyptians, warden of the tombs
Sitting, waiting silently,hoping for the call
To unleash the awful curse,the ruler over all
Laden with their jewels,those bodies of the deep
With this strong protector, silently they sleep
Mummies, ageless centuries,have been buried there
Hoping in the after life, treasures they will share
Vandals you be warned now,robbers be aware
Try to steal from those rich graves, touch them if you dare
He will unleash horrors,to make your spirit scream
Spectre's from an afterlife, you have never seen
Silently he's waiting, come now, please beware
He will tear your heart and soul, yes, without a care
Leave the dead a sleeping, cold and undisturbed
Run from his watch, silently,and leave without a word
Author notes
Written October 30th, 2005
A contest entry
- Mythical Creatures 2 by rexi and eso.
300 points, ended November 6, 2005, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Mysteries of Egypt by Bosiarbooger by Bosiarbooger.
2250 points, ended January 27, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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congratulations on the green thingy
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Wow
A beautifully written piece just what I was looking for. Best of luck to you and thanks for sharing -
well done
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Thankyou
So pleased you like it, Ros -
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good luck in the contest
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what fine subject matter! the rhymes and the rythem of the entire peice is really something to speak of; it flowed perfectly. it makes it so much easier to read, and pleasent, kind off just holds you. you did an excelent job!
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Descriptive! The vivid details enable a reader to envision the very content of the poem. Grammatically, there are errors, albeit a few. However, those are the kind of which you need not worry about. Grammar takes a heartbeat to master; technique takes a lifetime. Well done.
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This is certainly a poetic delight...in several ways, upon experiencing it and then finding out the creator "lives" in England is not at all surprizing
, it just feels like something "Englsih"in the way it comes to the "reader" (as opposed by an, let's say, American...which I am, as well as, someone who used to teach about Ancient Egypt at an University and lived for awhile in the so called "modern" Egypt). The above comment is not to be taken as a "negative," it is to be taken in a way that shows how deft the poet is at making their work feel real, from an actual person...it's an organic piece of poetry...poem/poet/receiver...yet, it is done with such style, on the other hand, it allows one to feel like it is "real", not merely a bit of fantasy. Isn't that the trademark of the truly gifted Poet/Bard!?! After all, poetry existed long before the "printed word!"
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Many thanks sister, I think there will be a few more from the
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Fantastic!
Wow, this poem is like a movie! The words are so descriptive that the entire scene flash before my eyes and I have a vivid picture of the guardian of the temples!
I love it! It is such a treat to read a poem and at the same time it creates the whole scene in the imagination!
Great poem my dearest angel sister! Beautiful as can be! Good work!
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Yes, thankyou,Egypt has many mysteries as I am finding out at the moment, Ros
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Thankyou once again for taking the time to comment, Ros
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A jewel of a piece.
Oh how I just love your work!Entomed dead jewelled bodies just ripe for taking...But awaken her wrath we musn't'.
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