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Collecting Stones

My sister
takes her time, pausing
at each as if it were god.

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Written October 29th, 2005

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  • CoolHandLuke
    April 19, 2007

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    I can feel where your aiming. It feels so much like a child's heart. Discovering the awe of every wonder.


  • almostthesea
    April 23, 2006
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    heavy

    What a beautiful sentence. This terse description of your sister carries much more weight than it physically looks capable of. "[A]s if it were God" strangely, to me, (and wonderfully) seems to imply a similar thought, "as if she were God" and is appreciating and exploring each stone as if it were something more than just, a stone. (I think, maybe she's an artist.)

  • Black Star
    March 5, 2006
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    reminds me of something but i can't think what. i picture a giant picking up tiny people, smiling at them and then crushing them. or..maybe a 2 year old playing with ants. very zen in an american way.