i wish i had a picture of
our love
so i could show
the world
i wish i had the words to explain
our love
so i could whisper secrets to
the world
Author notes
I found this in an old email.
I said it was really bad,
which it is.
But I'm still posting it either way.
Written June 22nd, 2005
In a list
What did you think
Comments
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I don't think its bad... its actually a pretty cool idea. nice write.
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love vs the world
hi kayla...
i like the seperation in the title even. what don't you like about it? make a few changes, add a bunch of adjectives.... it's pretty though
this poem shows the paradox of wanting to shout your love ('tween just two people) at the mountain tops and tell all the wonderfullest secrets (meant for one set of ears) because you can barely contain them without worrying about losing trust from the person who told it.
would it ruin it all or does the World even want to know? why should they understand about sacredness of love? yet a bit like evangalism... gotta tell them in simple words about such a deep empassioned emotion hope you find the words & photos to do it with.... take care dearie...
God bless yah
ps you write better then you give yourself credit so never put your work down, why bother to try to downplay something? why bother posting? coz you write pretty good stuff
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