I wish I could close my eyes
And fall asleep safely in your arms
But I can't
I wish I could feel your breath on my skin
And fall asleep peacefully beside you
But I can't
I guess I'm afraid
To let you be so perfect
I create such irritations
To make your perfection fake
I dream that I change myself
And erase all that ails me
But that dream will never be
I fear, too much, I fear
I wish I could close my eyes
Feel your heartbeat, your breath
I wish I could dream in your embrace
I try so hard, yes I do try
But there's something failing me
My heart fails to be all it can for you
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Mary-Jane 29/10/05 23:59
Written October 29th, 2005
A contest entry
- 2nd Year Anniversary by brittany.geeze.
400 points, ended November 19, 21 entries
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Yeah I thought this was good too. Makes me want to try harder in my relationship. Speaking of which, I must go message my skishy.
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This piece was amazing... I really enjoyed the line "To make your perfection fake" It's brilliant. Good Job Keep up the good work!
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I admire this poem it really flows very well to suit my taste for a romantic poem.Good word flow makes the imagery in this one unique to the readers as a whole.GREAT WRITE!
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This was a very well done interpretation of the lyrics. I enjoyed reading it, and I thought you did an excellent job conveying the reality of not being good enough. Often it is our own hearts that fail us, and I liked the way you set it up with the lyrics. GREAT job. Thanks for entering, and good luck. Take care. -Trouble
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