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complete

I'm finally complete.
the missing piece is in place
you've got my heart
and that's all it takes

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Written October 28th, 2005

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  • Mybeautyisfake
    January 6, 2006
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    nice. very to the point. I think the period in the first line kinda throws me off. It just doiesnt make sence why thats there. But thats just my opinion i guess. I dont overly like the idea of a period in a poem. I think it just breaks the flow you know? But thats jut my opinion. Well your a very good writer. Keep it up. Best of luck..</3


  • worldswonder88
    November 10, 2005
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    short and simple, you went straight to the point. It was good, keep up the good work hope to see more work from you.

  • grumpysmurf
    November 5, 2005
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    sounds like someone is falling in love!!! good luck girly

  • worldswonder88
    October 28, 2005
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    well done

    I like it, but It is just a little short for me, I personally love detail. I like your emotion but there really isn't much there to define the sitution. I still enjoyed it don't get me wrong, just a little longer that's all I'm saying.

  • Liveforlove
    October 28, 2005
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    I love it, its short simple and to the point, you say exactly what you want to say and thats it

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