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Make Me Yours


(written by celticmoon and wbiro)


Take me in your arms, love me like no other
Ignite my body, set my soul on fire
Release my passion, make my heart soar
Spellbind me with your touch, melt me with your kiss
Whisper in my ear, drown me in sweet bliss
Embrace me with your essence, indulge me in your flesh
Fill me with your warmth,
Surround me with your compassion
Meld yourself to me, let us become one
Lift me to the heavens, proclaim your undying love
Take me, make me yours.....



I turn and we touch, bodies ignited, souls on fire
passions released, our hearts now soar!
Spellbound in her loving arms, melting more with each new kiss,
whispers in a longing ear drowning me in blissfulness!
Our essence embraced, our flesh indulged,
her warmth and mine in a passionate meld;
amid undying love divine, I take her,

and have made her forever mine!

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collaboration with wbiro
Written October 28th, 2005

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  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    February 2, 2008

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    Whoa, this is just beautifully sensual. I think you two do well together. I would have never guessed it as a collab piece. Very smooth


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    April 30, 2006
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    Wonderfully sexy and sensual, my friends! Enough to make one melt this is! Sigh....
    Thank you for sharing and for entering in the contest! You two did beautifully!!!!


  • E.m.d
    April 5, 2006
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    i love the picture i put it on my desktop background. Line after line of very powerful passionate words and amazingflow to ur words. How did you get it initalic font? Good luck in my contest very brilliant you are.


  • heartnsoul
    November 26, 2005
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    While it may not have started that way..... there are some words..that beg for an answer. It is with the answer, that brings is full circle. This is one of those moments. Beautifully done.. sensuous and gracefull all at the same time. Good luck in the contest.....
    ~Michelle~


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    November 26, 2005
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    I am thrilled you two choose to enter our contest,I was looking for celtic and her partner, I for one thank you so much for your entries..I enjoyed both parts emencely,good luck in the contest you two..LovinCharmer will be commenting later this week he is away for a few days ..Linda


  • Celticmoon
    October 29, 2005
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    Not only is wbiro's addition to this piece wonderfully amazing he is too. I was honored to have his words added to mine in this piece, I still am. And as for wbiro, you should check out his work if you haven't already. He is brilliant!

    Thank fro your kind words my dear, so glad you enjoyed this piece.


    Blessings
    celticmoon


  • flowerpot
    October 29, 2005
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    Oh wow, if that isnt the most passionate thing i have read! I loved wbiro's addition, i think it added a great response to the first part. A great poem!
    Flowerpot

  • Celticmoon
    October 28, 2005
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    A common subject it maybe but always expressed differently with each poet. And when you can combine the expressions of love by two poets it thus creates the ultimate expression of love.

    Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on our work


  • wbiro gold member
    October 28, 2005
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    lol yes bohemianpoet, this common theme will plague man for the rest of his days!

  • Celticmoon
    October 28, 2005
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    Thank you so much for your kind words. I must confess this didn't start as a collab but I was more than happy to add my sweet wbiro's addition. It definately perfected this poem into a masterpiece of love.

    So I thank you once again for your comment,
    And I thank him with all my heart(now that it's finally regaining it's normal pace) for his breathtaking words of love.

  • LaBoheme
    October 28, 2005
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    Very passionate and well written. My only teeny weeny little critique is that this subject is a very common theme. *dodges stones* (by the way, I lover the username! I'm a total sap for anything celtic. so beautiful)

  • wbiro gold member
    October 28, 2005
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    Hey! I get these comments, too, as a collaborator! hehe... well, thank you, Your Hine Us! (sounds so... natural! lol)
    Edited on Oct 28, 5:36 p.m. because ''.


  • Your Hine Us
    October 28, 2005
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    Wow what a love poem this one is,line after line this one was on fire,very well done keep them a coming .

  • wbiro gold member
    October 28, 2005
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    Woah! Those last two line are a guy killer, moon! You say there seems to be something missing... hmmm... yes... the response of a man! One moment please...

  • x-Joness-x
    October 28, 2005
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    i like it

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