How hard would it be
To find misery
In labels of tables
On dressed up old fables
Of towering dusk
Or throwing the musk
Hiding messers of dressers
Or more than the lessers.
Could I impede,
Grasp my own deed
Amid razzles and dazzles
And faux empty frazzles.
Upon minor impact
Of face still intact
As I schmooze you and use you
And all but confuse you.
While love is the word
Quite often heard
Above sparring and warring
And possible scarring
Truth is, my mouth
Can waggle in drought
While my soul is control
Taking more than it's toll.
Loving my enemy
Lost to epitome
Of swagger and dagger,
Societies stagger.
Acceptable notions
In property potions
Will cost in the loss
Of loves sweet emboss.
Author notes
Was I supposed to put anything here? 
Minimal punctuation intended, but let me know if a portion is confusing as a result of its absence and I will consider it.
Written October 28th, 2005
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Lol, Mollz, it is a bit of a --quick-- piece. It did seem to fall out of the pen a stanza at a time. Thanks for taking the time to comment. And thanks for running the contest. It was very simple, but very inspirational
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I must admit, I love your work. I've read many writings of yours, and I can't help but love them. And like someone mentioned, you don't see the word "epitome" used, and you have used it well in this. And I love the rhyming, it's difficult to write something like this and add the rhyming. Although, I did feel I had to read it quick to keep up with it, does that make sense? Like, I wasn't taking it line by line, but rather a whole stanza at a time. Do you get what I'm saying? Or am I just rambling? Anyway, enough of that, I do love this, and the rest of your work. Thank you for entering!!!!!!
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Written well.
Okay and I liked this one too it had a certain style to it like a swing rhythem in dancing. Written well. -
Lol, glad you liked it. This is sort of about the song and dance we go through in our attempts to figure out the love thang
. We miss so much of the true essence of our relationships with others in those games we learn to play and with what our society often teaches us is important. Sometimes ya just got to think for yourself or ya miss the boat 
. I think I am with you on the dead tired thing. I am gonna call it a night--ITS A NIGHT-- Thanks again for the comments and the applause
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great
thistle, aside from being dead tires this anothter very nice write. like I say you always have good. oh, by the way this part
As I schmooze you and use you sound very interesting image and Visions -
Thanks, Abigail, for all the kind words. I am glad that it struck a chord for you. I so enjoy writing things a bit off beat and away from the norm and it is always great when someone gets it. I think we all feel that way when a poem comes together for us. Thanks again for taking the time to read it
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this is great i love the way you used all those rhyming words together it went well, loved the last verse just there in that told a story of love or not however you may perceive it nice job lol abigailxx
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Lol, is it a form? Sometimes I just get a rhythym going in my head and things just follow suit . Sort of reminds me of those rhyming childrens books that were so fun to read . Epitome is one of my favorite words. I often mispell it for pronunciation sake though. No one ever mentions it when I do Thanks for the comments. I am off to one of those silly American high school cross town rivalry football games to act foolish with everyone else in town I will be checking to see what you have been up to when I get back home
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Not often you see epitome in a poem, good for you, I can't say i'm overly fond of this form of poetry but if you are going to do it, do it well and you certainly have.
Barb
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