This I promise you
We met and fell in love for a brief interlude
spent every moment we could together.
Walks we would take along the river bank
kisses we shared as you held my hand.
What bliss we felt as our love began to grow
I want to stay by your side forever.
Then you say you’re not free to be with me
that you belong to someone else who needs you.
My heart is breaking at the thought of leaving
but leave I must as I cannot come between you.
You say “Don’t go, I need you here with me!”
You can’t have both of us, you must decide.
As I wait for my plane to arrive the tears fall
you hold my hand and you whisper my name.
“Darling, it’ll all work out wait and see,
we will be together! This I promise you.”
Author notes
Now I wait for him to call.
2. This I Promise You
Written October 28th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
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300 points, ended October 31, 2005, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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what a trmedious work jenni, this is really nice write strong words
My heart is breaking at the thought of leaving
but leave I must as I cannot come between you
this make me more fine n relaxed, mean ur words are toxin friend, have i ever imagine u will go like this -
3 Stars ***
but then you forgot to give me your number.. so how can i call you now my lovley love pluff pluff spongey doll??
well.. humn.. time to act abnormally
nice poem here, humn, stupid person i must say, you cant leave the person YOU love for other person who needs you.. i mean..one can handle the situation.. but this one was wierd..
goody woody though.. enjoy writing
nice write.. good work.. thanks for sharing my dear friend ..............
*hugs and kisses*
*gives choco*
take cares and have anice time my dear friend ................................ just keep it up ..................................... your humble little friend ....................................
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............................ .................... - vic ( who else????? )
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Thank you very much for your comment on my poem
Jennie -
excellent
This is lovely! I love poems that end on hope. Well written, and the picture is perfect for it. Great job. Good luck to you. -
Thank you shubs for your wonderful comment.....you handsome guy
Jennie
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The human nature is a tapestry of different emotions and love is the most bewildering one of them all..what contains love or what does love mean is a complex question...it becomes complex when one of the partners decides that there is someone else whose love is stronger or something to that effect..Love is not blind..Lovers are!
Your poem epitomises this stark reality..but it is also hopeful in its fairy tale ending..[fairy in old english]..beautifully done and interlude a fav word with me==Shubs -
This is very beautiful. I could feel the sadness in this piece. Keep up the awesome poetry!!!
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Sadly beautiful. A lovers triangle never works out for everyone involved. Painful...but magical!! best wishes in the contest.
Sam
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