The birds are chirping,
the plants are slurping-
the sunlight, for health,
giving us beauty as wealth!
taking in CO2,
giving oxygen to me and you.
they give us godly love,
tender and sweet as a dove!
green and red are not the only colours,
thousands are multi-hued flowers,
a resplendent feast for tired eyes,
from morn till eve and all odd hours.
the light green hedges,
and the pink hibiscus,
the plant says, 'touch me not'
but i have a sly thought!
the twittering birds are wonderful,
as tender and cuddly as silky wool!
i came to this place, with a decision wise,
here it lies, a beautiful paradise!
bees and butterflies may be small,
yet a load of pollen they haul,
to be turned into pots of tasty honey,
to have with cake, bread and tea!
this is the description,
of my lovely garden.
it helps me put down every burden,
when i am with sad thoughts laden...
the flowers are happily always there,
with lovely colour, shape and fragrance fair.
so should we also strive to please,
with our manners sweet, putting all at ease...
Author notes
this is another true piece which is about my garden and i really got inspired when i heard the lovely sound of birds and whatever else i have mentioned in this poem...and so, this inspiration is totally from my garden only...! isn't that cool?... by the way, just for info, this is the Clerihew type of poetry in which i have written this poem!
for a contest: option no. 1
Written October 28th, 2005
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300 points, ended May 19, 2006, 11 entries
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well done
Awwww this is lovely! Your garden sounds like such a wonderful place. Thanks for entering my contest. Lots of luck to you. God bless.
Brian -
I will be here to read the poem later again. But here is your assignment which carries 5 marks. Give detailed views on the poem daffodils by wordsworth.
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thnx!!
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thousands are multi-hued flowers,
a resplendent feast for tired eyes,
from morn till eve and all odd hours.
I LOVED that paragraph, it is so true to the word about the beauty and versatility of nature.
Great write
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well, i don't think i missed anything, but was just late!! actually i edited the poem after entering it!! so, u can check ur ruling once more
luv, lifeisjazzy!!!!
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Thank you for following the rules
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Amazing
Truly an amazing piece of work...I loved the flow and the imagination used to write this. Good luck in my contest and thank you for entering.
Keep writing
Countrybabe
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thankyou so much david for commenting on both of my poems. and i know this is more about nature than the meal of colours. yet, i just entered that one also since it was the only other one i had closer to nature, but now recently i have written 2 more about nature, and i even requested u to allow more than two entries through a commetn on the contest, but anyway, thanks for liking this one atleast!
hope you had and will have a gala time in nature with your contest 
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The imagery in this poem is beautiful. I think it is stronger than The Meal of Colours. I loved the lines "bees and butterflies may be small,
yet a load of pollen they haul,
to be turned into pots of tasty honey,
to have with cake, bread and tea!"
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hey thx for d info...i generally write d lines that touch my heart when i comment...i am new to dis site and didnt know dat we shld not write d stanza from d poem...i will avoid it hereafter....thank you...
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thankyuo so much for the sweet and wonderful comment. hey, just for your information, you should not copy a stanza in a comment, because the moderators can catch you for that, as it can be an offense for collecting points. i don't say that you did it purposely but just for future thanks, and merry christmas
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i liked these lines a lot....a very beautiful comparison...
"the flowers are happily always there,
with lovely colour, shape and fragrance fair.
so should we also strive to please,
with our manners sweet, putting all at ease..."
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Lovely
Aw a person after my own heart. Sounds just like how I feel about my garden! I love my hibiscus, spend all winter trying to keep them alive for spring and summer! MN is not exactly their native climate! Loved this one! Made me take a deep breath and remember winter WILL NOT last forever, I still have MY garden too! Thanks for the pick-me-up, didn't expect gardens in December, but I needed one
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thankyou so much for your opinion, but i guess the simily says as soft as a dove or something like that. not sure, but thanks anyway!
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This was a good poem, Alot of wonderful imaginary. Some of the rhyme seemed a bit forced or out of place " like a dove" I think you could have used something better there. but thats my unprofessional opinion. The flow was good other then that
Good luck toyou
~ Waiting
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thankyou for commenting on both my poems
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you have made me want a garden!!!! really descriptive poem. I really enjoyed reading it.
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good poem..
good luck in the contest
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thankyou... this was really about my garden haven and HEAVEN!
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this is very nice love it you did a great job lov,great reading about your garden,good language skills,good flow makes it easy to read and understand,thanks for shareing--kirby
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wow this was awesome!!! like this piece..... fully expressed in a short write.Remarkable job with this piece. I absolutely adore nature so your poem touched me deeply. very creative imagery and incredible beautiful
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thanks lost inside, and thanks for commenting!
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wow, very nice. i also liked that you made everything ryhmed. you did a good job on this. good luck in the contest!
<3 always,
megan -
Remarkable job with this piece. I absolutely adore nature so your poem touched me deeply. It is truely amazing how the little things that many pass on by can bring such peace and delight. Beautiful to the fullest. Good luck, and thank-you for putting the form of poetry even though I forgot to ask.
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This is very nice, very vivid and descriptive, showing us you love for nature's beauty. When I was a kid I have had a garden too, full of flowers and fruits... Just keep writing.
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How wonderful!!! I wish spring was here, winter is so cold
This is such a great poem, I want a garden too!
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