~by Gregg Rowe~
you fucker
fucked with/up my concept of love
by withholding your young heart
through ocean blinded blue eyes
tangled with blond locks
and Adonis lips
you fucked
with/up my philosophical mind
teased me with a taste of your
young naive thoughts
tangled like grape vines
swaying above my head
like Damocles's Sword
anticipating to taste
sweet nectar juices
then you swiped them away
you fucked
with/up my trust
made me think/believe
I was your romantic poet
whispering couplets
after we kissed
under the Montréal moonlight
in my personal Garden of Eden
you fucked
with/up my private life
by accepting my invitation
for a night of
Maryjane's/porno films/ mutual masturbation
that led to wild sixty-nining
you fucking
stayed/laid
yet -- not next to me, by
my roommate
for over a year
you fucked
my repaired heart
still mending from surgery and
you fucker
tell me
my
Parc Lafontaine high hustler
why --
you
could never just had
fucked me
Author notes
I make no apologies for the language in this poem...sometimes my writing is a release of pent-in, built-up frustration screaming for release.
Written October 28th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Love Gone Wrong by notmissperfect.
300 points, ended March 31, 2006, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sweet Revenge by cookie crumbs.
300 points, ended December 14, 2006, 26 entries
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this was an amazing poem! i hate that people are on you about saying fuck, its ok to use it as often as you did, ive seen people over-use swearing and you used it perfectly.
My fave part:
"you fucked
with/up my philosophical mind
teased me with a taste of your
young naive thoughts
tangled like grape vines
swaying above my head
like Damocles's Sword
anticipating to taste
sweet nectar juices
then you swiped them away"
You have much talent, Good luck in the contest!
-Cassie -
first off, you shouldnt even have to apologize for the words you used, i dont think it would have meant the same if you didn't, and for people to get mad at you about that is stupid.
but okay. having that said.
this was definately very emotional and powerful. i absolutely love the title.
this was an excellent write. Thank you so much for submitting it, and good luck to you.
-britt -
Switching the wording around doesnt excuse it from the rule and I have no problem with it. Not that you would have won anyway,but telling someone who doesnt share the same view with u to fuck off doesnt make it mature.
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Thats all well and dandy but for the fact that ur still sayin fucked up every set and fucking this and fucking that and fuck fuck fuck. If u feel that is good work then go with it. I trully dont care. But u left out the part of my rules that said i didnt want wat u did.
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Emotional
I don't think you should apologise for the language you chose to use, without it the imapct on the reader would not be the same. It is good to use words and poetry as a way to vent frustrations and express emotions, that's what I usually use it for. Whomever this poem is addressed to must have really hurt you somehow, and all I can say is that time heals everything. Take care, and keep writing, Heather x -
I agree this was really cool, neat, and funny and fuck lol You are right if you are releasing an emotion of feelings (rage,anger,whatnot) words should not be restrained. That is also how I feel about music like I think if it was written with Parental Advisory detected it should not be dubbed over and changed for any reason...that is not how it was born (so to speak)............Anyway I thought this here was great and actually without the cuss words I think it would have been flat in a way, but I do like how you have titled it so that there is no cuss words but at the same time imply that there are some in it. Great Job
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Well i have to admit, this cut right to the bone - and frustration was something i felt throughout - no hurt, anxiety - just frustration - not knowing where to go or what to say. Well done, i love how you have expressed yourself
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Excellent job in venting your emotions... bra
You have taken your gift and done a magnificent job of venting and obviously you have many reasons as you quailfy them in pure form to release them all ... May you truly find the comforts and joys that you so richly deserve
Wishing you and yours much success in all of your endeavors
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Very emotional
wow that was something! But it is your way of releasing and it is better than keeping it pent up. You did it in a great way
expect the curse word.Obviously somebody hurt you and disappointed you very badly i can imagine how u feel.
check my poems if u like -
Gregg , no doubt that you are working through some pain and venting anger (the two are so closely related)that at times we do not which is which
. I wish you healing , and whomever you are addressing is not worthy of you....so it is their loss..( that has become my outlook on life anywat , and it has made a lot of things much easier. I have learned my self worth and that is worth everything to me...be good to yourse;f
xo
Reenie
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Loved it, I think you have said what most want to, but don't have the nerve to say, so cheers !
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I dont know what the F**K to say about this but at least your anger helps you to write...
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dont need to apologze yet another great piece be who u r and a lil ranting and release of anger is good i want to read more of your poems cuz they r awesome i like the spin u put on it it was full of emotion n written wonderfully once more u r a great poet
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Scary is the hate you keep hidden within you barried still, untill now....WOW ...powerful!
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wow
wow that was something! But it is your way of releasing and it is better than keeping it pent up. You did it in a great way! Sometimes life just simply sucks... but still you have to hang on for the ride so might as well "scream" it out like when we go on a rollercoaster ride... that's life... -
damn girls can be bitches, didnt you know that? this line really just speaks the truth about many women, ive done it myself...
teased me with a taste of your
young naive thoughts
tangled like grape vines
that is just one awsome line!
I absolutely love this piece and how its all put together. Wonderful
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Wow Gregg, I'm sorry for what obviously seems very painful here. You know, I know how you feel believe it or not. I could have very well written this poem myself but about my husband. I'm sorry you're going through this Sweetie
Obviously somebody hurt you and disappointed you very badly. I can understand a write like this, sometimes you just have to take what's in you and get it out. Just remember that nobody can make you feel like this without your permission. The price we pay sometimes for being so trusting and loving. Just know that you deserve so much better
Be Well and Be Blessed. -
terrific chanting
This was just too cool. Loved every line. Like you know how it is. I've known a couple of fuckers like that. They're maddening, and laughable years later. You make me smile. Keep writing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! -
woohoo
i don't know why. but i found this piece intensely funny. good job. -
kool
really nice hehe -
lol. I originally meant to type "haste" but there was a typo. "Hate" works just as well. ha ha.
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There is no need to ever censor yourself, and I'm glad you didn't becaus this poem is real and obviously written in hate, which is what makes it so good. I have to say..I like the sexual references, they caught me a little off gaurd, hehe. Great poem!
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