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Unconditional Love (Pixiku)

Unconditional love
Is not a negotiation contingent on
You meeting my demands.

Author notes

Woot!  My first pixiku.  Take it easy on me
Written October 27th, 2005

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  • Violet Moodswing Greeters member
    October 28, 2005
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    Thanks, Sheryl, I find that --words of wisdom-- really don't carry much weight unless they apply to me first and foremost. Like most things, it is easy to preach, but much harder to practice

  • TooRainbow silver member
    October 28, 2005
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    Great job with the form. Often when authors try something new they worry more about the structure than the meaning. You did a good job putting in a well needed message to most people. I like that you say "you meeting my demands" rather than "me meeting your demands". It gives the idea a very personal edge. Good job!
    Sheryl


  • Violet Moodswing Greeters member
    October 27, 2005
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    You know, this form could be quite addictive


  • SEA angel gold member
    October 27, 2005
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    Excellent

    That is true. Your border is a perfect example of unconditional love. I think you set this up perfectly with the stress points (line breaks) in just the right place to make the best presentation of your message.