He walks in solemn, silent grace,
slowly trudging through the world of our sad creation.
They say he's strong; he knows he's weak,
We see his victories, the warrior!
He sees the snags of the failure.
It's all he sees
It's all he knows...
but all we see is what he shows us...
He shows us the grim-faced warrior-man,
Who stands like a rock against the sea;
He shows us the tireless warrior,
Who won't give in to society...
His blade, strong and swift and true,
Is his cunning, his guile, his heart,
It is his bow, decorated and well-used,
Is his direction, tireless soul...
But his armor, patched and rusted with time,
His helmet torn askew,
His faithful steed dead long ago,
And his hands burdened with the memory,
of made-up better days...
So he goes to slay the dragon!
In this land of seelie and elves,
quivering wings and flowing hair...
He feels unwanted, unneeded, and lost,
He feels the wind in the skies,
He hears the wolf's lonely bay
and he tastes the tears he cries...
And all the creatures look at him,
At this strong warrior-man,
As he stands shaking firmly before the dragon
And dies inside...
Because he's no warrior who stands before you...
He's a peasent of bastard birth...
He's a coward and a fool,
And despair has long ago corrupted his worth
But to that princess in the tower,
And to all the peasent boys
His armor gleams in the rising sun,
And he falters not, as he approaches his death,
the savior of the maid.
Will the future have hope? or will this warrior-man
Fall because he is afraid?
He walks in solemn, silent grace,
Still in the world of our creation...
They say he's strong.
He's so very weak.
But still we see his steadfast heart
And still we see his soul
And still he stumbles, for his feet,
Still don't know
where to go...
Author notes
I apologize for the freeverse lately, but I enjoy this poem to an extent. It's obviously about more than a dragon slayer. Enjoy it if you will. Criticize it if you must. But I appreciate comments of any nature.
For The Contest: This is for when superheroes fail option, and it's symbolic. It's a real life story without real-life terms. Don't call me on it, that's all I ask. (I know what I wrote)
-Arias' Son
Written October 27th, 2005
A contest entry
- When Superheroes Fail by Night Phoenix.
875 points, ended February 25, 2007, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Well done Lyneum
This poem is cool. My favourite bit although I don't know if intentional but it definetely works for me is transforming the word peasant to peasent because I feel Pea sent is like a hinting synonym to this princess and the pea story, you know the pea under the mattress. Any princess who these days sleeps in uncomfortable bedding deserves a meddle, we live in an age of ida down and happy slumber, best wishes to you and all your work. Rob B.
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Wow, what fantastic imagery! I'm so glad you won on this because it's really excellent. You really painted a crisp, clear picture that's seen almost effortlessly, and while I read the comment and know it was written to be literal, it's definitely got some nice symbolic undertones. I love how the fantasy touches are so light that they don't overwhelm the image; instead, they enhance it. Really nice job.
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This is very good I enjoyed it alot...Great Job...
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ireally like this poem. i love the way your words flow, and i love how you incorporate your feelings deep into the poem. i understand how you feel here, thats the whole reason i instated the contest really, to see if others suffered as i have... anyways best of luck in my contest, and ii f you ever need someone to talk to the doors always open.. God Bless
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This reminds me of two people, I call them brave knights... Both of them amazing, and this is just the same! I loved the wording, thanks for the entry and good luck!
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very good
MY GREAT APOLOGIES...my computer was under virus hostage and i am finally able to access these poems..
This was a really good poem...i liked the way you chose to word it....altough regretably...i did say it must rhyme in the rules...good job keep writing
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My sole complaint would be that it is quite difficult to read due to color selection. Might I suggest a lighter font colour?
I believe that the knight shall prevail. I hope he does. I hope they all due. My boyfriend is such a knight, and my "little brother". I hope they succeed as I hope your protagonist succeeds. Because they deserve it. Because they've worked so hard, knowing all along they could fail. And they try anyway.
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this was really good. i could sense all the time you put into this. and how well thought out it was. amazing imargery. it stung when i read it. i'm a huge fan of free verse myself,my rhyming one's are so cheesy. but this has really good flow in it. not only that,it was really sophisticated. really good choice of words. i would have to say that the whole thing was just amazing. so thank you for entering. and good luck.
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Wow this poem is the best I've read in a long time! It's really full of emotion, but not contrived at all. I don't understand why this didn't win the contest, it's amazing! I love the way you put such a common, everyday situation into the fairytale format, it really helps empahsise the hidden vulnerability of this seeming tough guy.
Congratulations on writing such a cool poem.
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Hmmm, yes, it is a well written poem, and very potent, but I'm not sure if it fits. I will allow it since we can say that maybe Prince Charming is just a mask for Prince-Not-So-Charming. That definitely could do. Thanks for entering and good luck.
~Kittii
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This is a very symbolic poem. I like to write poetry where it can be interpreted in many different ways. If it means anything to you at all, then the answer is in your life. Do you know anyone who is a "warrior" such as this character? Did they survive?
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Excellent, something that had to take time to write, and tells of such a wonderous tale, but did the warroir survive?
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nice poem
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A few months did you good out there eh? Did you write all these out there in the wild blue yonder?
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that must have taken you a long while to write that! great work! i loved it!!!!! keep up the great work
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