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Farewell


Cat and mouse
A lil game you play
Not my style
Now hear what I say....

Your sweet one day
The next you are nasty
Well, OK...
Whatever tickles your fancy

Weeks go by
And here you are
Begging my return
Now this is bizarre

You never apologize
You're to stubborn
You haven't backed down
Not since the day you were born

On your knees
Now before me
With tear-filled eyes
You plea...."Forgive me"

With love in my heart
I take you back
A few days later
Once again, you attack

My heart is fragile,
Not a toy for your amusement
It's full of love and passion
For your enjoyment

The constant hurt,
I can no longer bare
Why I bother to tell you,
It's not like you care

The time has come,
I'm leaving today
I'm so sorry, but
You give me no reason to stay

We had some good times,
Even for such a short spell
With tear filled eyes
I bid you farewell

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Written October 27th, 2005

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  • flowerpot
    October 27, 2005
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    Oh wow.. This is amazing. Its so terribly sad and heartbreaking, but such a deep and effective poem. You convey your emotions very well, and the last lines were just brilliant. I loved how this poem ends, its fantastic. The end lines are often the most important when i read/write poetry, and i think these are wonderful. The metaphor use is effective. I loved the continueing cat and mouse theme, the way you opened with the cat and mouse game, and later stated your heart is not a toy. That gave me this image of a cat playing with a toy, and made the theme consistent throughout the poem. I really like this, fantastic work Celtic.
    Flowerpot


  • poetryality silver member
    October 27, 2005
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    In relationships where there is on-going pain, it is best to bid your partner "farewell". Life is so short. If happiness is not what we yearn for then yes, stay in the abusive amalgamation. it will no doubt get worse and worse.

    It is hard to bid someone we love adieu, but often it is necessary for our survival. You have expressed sentiments that I am sure many readers can and will relate to.

    This is a sad, melancholy write but it expresses feelings from the heart. If this is reality, I pray the heart has a speedy recovery.

    Many Blessings
    ♥ Renee ♥


  • StarvingAuthor
    October 27, 2005
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    Wow, celtic, wow.

    I've got this going on right now in my life.

    Why do they do it? Stupid games of cat and mouse???

    You continue to amaze me with you talent. I'm so glad I added you to my favorites. I get a little smile when I see that you have a new poem. You are SUCH a phenomenal writer!!

    Great poem. Spoke volumes to me.