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Her Colors Explode!

 


 

Corn silk and crimson
I smell in her hair
azure and aqua
in the night air.


 

Bisque and mint cream
mixed in her skin
linen and maroon
are where I begin.


 

Tomorrow light-yellow
today old lace
yesterday pale goldenrod
I've traced on her face.


 

Midnight blue
at every midday,
snow at midnight,
in the eve, slate gray.


 

Plum and purple
I taste on the breeze,
add a touch of blue violet
and my heart she has seized!


 

Swimming in magenta
and lemon chiffon
her medium orchid
carries me on.


 

Misty rose lace
hinting up from her jeans
saddle-brown seashell
laced boots to her knees.


 

Colors explode
in a visual din
of navy and olive
and honeydew trim.


 

Khaki? Hot pink?
It doesn’t matter any more,
they have been all kicked off
and now lie on the floor!


 









Color Reference:
www.mountaindragon.com/html/140names.htm

Author notes

For mum, and for Imme, who 'misses my free spirit poems'...
Written October 27th, 2005

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  • wbiro gold member
    January 15, 2006
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    Thanks, Dreamon, now I'm jealous on two counts- your hot mama and she actually uses creams and lotions!

  • Dreamon
    January 15, 2006
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    really visual

    I have been maried for almost 16 years and every time my hot mama comes out of the bathroom I smell the creams and lotions that she chooses to use and this poem with its smells and visuals cause me to think of her...Thankes


  • Porcelain Doll
    October 30, 2005
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    thanks for suggesting this! It's very nice *laughs* Oh dear... don't know quite what to say about it, but dayum.... hot write, and it was very fun to read ^.^ Nice job, and I found no errors
    ~Amy

  • wbiro gold member
    October 29, 2005
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    Well, there is no higher honor than to hit your nail on the head, Mary Cat! (ouch!) lol
    Edited on Oct 29, 1:35 p.m. because ''.


  • Cat
    October 29, 2005
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    !!!!!! exactly this! this is exactly what i'm talking about!!!



  • SexyAngel0418
    October 29, 2005
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    ... THis is awesome AP daddy!!! You did a great job!!! It is very colorful and beautiful!!! The ending is hilarious!!!

    Hugs,
    Your brightest angel

    PS GOod luck in the contest

  • Molly Densmore silver member
    October 29, 2005
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    This is really beautiful and very, yes!! colorful. I really enjoyed how you used colors for such descriptions. This shows the love for nature and for the colorful. Very nice and ravishing. Thank you for sharing this. moved


  • wbiro gold member
    October 28, 2005
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    thank you, Imme, for tugging at my free-spirited muse...!


  • wbiro gold member
    October 28, 2005
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    Yes, Robin, that last explosion has to be my favorite, too! lol


  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    October 28, 2005
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    hehehe...now wouldn't it be funny if a man won this contest You color us so well my sweet friend. This is so well done. All the colors of the rainbow, but the best one is the color of heated flesh Well done!

    ~Lyrical


  • imonlyme7
    October 28, 2005
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    I love it...I love it!!!! Wow at the colors you used..and the background..awesome poem..and good to see you return my friend! Keep us smiling!


  • cherche -d -ame
    October 28, 2005
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    very sensuaql in the beginning...and i guess it still was at the end , but the visual for me kind of broke the spell...for I had to smile best wishes in this contest,
    Reenie


  • wbiro gold member
    October 28, 2005
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    Good morning, Anna, glad you liked my silly! lol and the explosion of colors! May your day be as bright!


  • Anna Emkah
    October 28, 2005
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    Hahahahaha.... you're such a naugthy boy, but rather funny as well. Anna.


  • wbiro gold member
    October 28, 2005
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    lol cheering section! I did have my detractors!

  • ecrivain01
    October 27, 2005
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    Intriguing write. I see your cheering section agrees. Also, the background is nice (as someone else said too). The ending was great. Good job.


  • Heartofacircle
    October 27, 2005
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    Very nice, I like this background here too, its so pretty and the poem just sparkles, thanks for sharing this and keep up the awesome poetry.


  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    October 27, 2005
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    LOL I loved how serious this all was up to the very end of the poem. Keep up the awesome poetry!!!


  • Celticmoon
    October 27, 2005
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    awwww you are just so sweet

  • wbiro gold member
    October 27, 2005
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    and a panoply of rainbowed colors to you to, my Southern Bel!

    panoply PAN-uh-plee, noun:
    A splendid or impressive array! lol
    Edited on Oct 27, 10:48 because ''.


  • wbiro gold member
    October 27, 2005
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    Thank you, Mr. Midnight, glad you enjoyed the colors...!

  • wbiro gold member
    October 27, 2005
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    thanks you, raspberry, my favorite AP grand niece! Good luck? No, AP sons are not eligible for their mum's trophies! lol


  • wbiro gold member
    October 27, 2005
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    thank you, Kylia, yes, the last lines... there will have to be two versions, I think... one not so intrusive!


  • wbiro gold member
    October 27, 2005
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    thank you, Janice! and my AP daughter SwtAsWine sends her regards!

  • Celticmoon
    October 27, 2005
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    Colors colors everywhere! I love it! So vibraint, so expressive......various colors a sweet treat for ones eyes. I do not blieve any woman has ever been painting with such a unique description before. You certainly do have quite a way with words sweetie.

    I brilliantly written prismatic piece of poetry.




    Blessings
    Bel
    Edited on Oct 27, 10:37 because ''.


  • midnight whisper
    October 27, 2005
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    a perfect finish. like the clever use of colours. all the best in the contest


  • wbiro gold member
    October 27, 2005
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    thank you, wishingtree (Katie!), for the fine comparason to many a novel...!


  • raspberry Greeters member
    October 27, 2005
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    this s excelent my dear,, i can see ur sense of color in not just the words but in your bground too.. Good luck darling


  • wishintreeUK
    October 27, 2005
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    Brilliant! what more can I say

    ~Katie~


  • Kylia Skydancer
    October 27, 2005
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    very pretty.

    It carried me for eons into a haze of colour and beauty.

    I don't think the last verse is the best though...it seemed to break the ambient feeling and I felt a bit resentful at its intrusion.

    lovely write.

    good luck here.


  • Janice M Pickett
    October 27, 2005
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    excellent

    LOL. Typical Male LOL clothes kicked off on the floor. LOL
    I loved this but I think that last line was my favourite LOL.
    Hugs
    Jan


  • Night Hope gold member
    October 27, 2005
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    'Midnight blue at every midday, snow at midnight, in the eve, slate gray...' Lovely penning, Wayne...You've painted her well, indeed...Good luck in the contest, my Friend...I've entered one, as well... Wanda

  • wishintreeUK
    October 27, 2005
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    Brilliant use of colour image, this is an amazing way to use colour in a poem. As I read through, I was reminded of many a novel I have read where the writer has brought to life his subject matter with the use of colour... you have bought this off superbly, Well Done!

    ~Katie~
    Edited on Oct 27, 1:41 because 'ops typo:'.


  • wbiro gold member
    October 27, 2005
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    lol bad color scheme... better reason to kick them all onto the floor, I suppose!


  • zt
    October 27, 2005
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    Well this woman certainly had a bad color sense. Oi! I liked the images you conjured with your color choices. They were well chosen and a bit metaphorical, it seemed. You did well, so good luck in the contest!
    Edited on Nov 01 because ''.


  • FallingSideways silver member
    October 27, 2005
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    I am speechless to this particular piece but wow... amazingly done


  • wbiro gold member
    October 27, 2005
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    I think you have an entry of your own here, subbu!

  • purefriendship
    October 27, 2005
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    WOW

    Fantastic background with wonderful wordings,Amazingly true,you will win our hearts dear wbiro !
    I add few lines to appreciate her
    Hair of golden brown resting gently
    over pools of cool blue,
    burning me deep.
    your lips, your smile,
    your every word...
    those are the things
    for which I'm weak
    and although for another's arms you rest
    and in another's heart
    a flame you keep.
    I know if should that hair,
    those lips, that smile so beguiling
    ever come to harm
    I would do nought else but weep
    Hope you win this contest with flying colours !
    regards
    subbu (purefriendship)


  • Touchof1der silver member
    October 27, 2005
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    WoW! This your muse is really kickin' it tonight son of mine. This is great!! You did a fantastic job here. If they all read like this... I am going to be in a quandry! Great job. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!
    ♥ Touchof1der

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