banshee wails
children scurry
death is near
Author notes
Written October 26th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- 100 th GROUP CONTEST; by Dove by Partners In Crime.
900 points, ended April 12, 2008, 126 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This reminds me of an old phrase I used to hear as a kid... and never quite knew what it meant... "screaming like a banshee"
At least now I know there is such a thing... I think
Good luck in the cotnest
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uh oh sounds like big trouble!
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Haunting, eerie, scarey... all of this. Each line of this haiku brings visions of fear and the final line gives me chills.
Good job and I wish you good luck in the contest
Dee
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This is a haunting haiku. I got chills at the very end.
I could hear, feel, and picture almost everything in this piece.
Kari
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fearing death, they scurry when the banshee wails. love the imagery this haiku gives. a person could take this several ways also. thank you for entering the group contest and good luck
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banshee wails
children scurry
death is near
banshee wails
Dark and mysterious i think here, like some old horror film, the moon partially clouded by black shapes, rain slipping from the sky as occosaional flashes of lightning erupt.
children scurry
I can see their wide-eyed fear from here! Clinging to them like rolls of smoke. Their feet a positive blur in the rush to escape the night. To get indoors, in the safety of mother's arms.
death is near
And the shadow scuttles across the theme, looking for anyone caught out, not quick enough.
Halloween, you have to love it.
Edited on Mar 10, 6:37 p.m. because ''. -
Nice 3-4-3 haiku. The sound of the banshee pierced through the darkness and hit my ears. Scary 'ku!!
Happy Halloween
Charishma
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