A soft spoken word, purified by her lips
A subtle soul which hinders the eclipse
A horrid shadow of the world purifies
When she gazes through her pearl-like eyes
And when she gives smile amidst the sacred cry
I fly like a bird up above the sky
Blessed by the sunlight, caressed by the wind
She lingers to the dew drop on the tamarind
Naked sight with a delicate plight
A wonder wandering with all her might
And when she shows the truth within every lie
I fly like a bird up above the sky.
She strokes the mythical eternity
A majestic mother to pity every fraternity
Hinders her pain and her sorrowful sorrows
When she senses our beautiful tomorrows
And when I see her kiss away every pry
I fly like a bird up above the sky.
- Vichitra Joshi (J.VIC)
Author notes
Hello,
This poem is especially made for bella kalishi 
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Time to be honest
I didnt make this poem on the spot after reading about your contest, i made this after my exams got over, so that i can post it as a bday present for her bday, but her contest got over and i came out too late for it. So i just kept this poem in my file. And today i post it in your contest. So, logically my poem is a prewrite, but its made for bella only.
: deep breathe :
Messege to bella from Velicate Vella Vily Vic 
( i hope she reads this 
) - Take it as a birthday present !! Many many happy returns of the day (advance/belated, depends when you'll read it ). Doesnt matter if you like this poem or not, but it just matter that you are an inspiring soul, sweet enough to influence many life (stop 
ing 
and read carefully ).Take cares and have a nice time, It was my privilege to write on you : does a happy Vella Valishi dance : 
...
--- >> see i can fly
*hugs and kisses*
take cares
Miss Me
- Vic
Written October 25th, 2005
What did you think
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Leave it to Vic-the-Pro-Poet for doing an exceptional and breathtaking job on describing somone!! ~looks jealously at bella..(jk Bella
~ Will u describe me too Viccy? ~looks innocently and tries to do puppy eyes~
Tc!
Love,
Ruchi -
aaawwww...you're such a sweetie pie. If i were young & not married...
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Guddy Guddy
wow....wonderful piece Viv...i dint know your full name but now i do....
Vaddekum....!Velicate Vella Vily Vic.......i wish you would write for me someday as well though i know you dont want to write much on funny things
anyhow jokes apart i would like to tell you the line i liked the most
Blessed by the sunlight, caressed by the wind
She lingers to the dew drop on the tamarind
aaha....khatti meethi...mouth watering line...isnt it????
chalo ou cant gift me an eclairs but i guess even a tamarind will do
anyhow.....waiting to hear you vic....remember i am mising you a lot.....waise i think i need not tell you that
Take Care
Love
Anshu
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Awwww!! This is sooooo sweet! Bella should feel like a vedy vedy special person
Another amazing write, Vic!!
I think this is an awesome birthday present for Bella, so if she don't like it then...grr..
Luv ya!
Your friend,
Lisi -
beautiful
as delicate words they speak to my soul
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Excellent Writing
A lovely unselfish idea, and a lovely poem. --Ellis -
Awesome Vic
joanna -
I LOVE IT!!
i am hannah by the way!
i
u lots & lots!!
see ya!
good boy, keep it up!!
Hannah
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Beautiful Write
Lovely Vic. -
very sweet and calming i like it.
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OH MY GOD THAT WAS SOOO BEAUTIFUL VIC
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the girl is very lucky, this is such a sweet poem, not too long...just perfect!It's clear how fond of her you are. Great poem (as always) 5/5 (i would applaud but I've used them all up for today. sorry)
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Hello pal!! I really like this poem, its beautiful, i see that yopu love the word eternal becuase you use that a lot. I like the way you use your emotions and experiances through poetry. good job!!
From sarah!
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Hey First, thanks for commenting on my poem. And this poem is wonderful, I am sure the girl for whom you wrote this likes it very much (I, for one, would LOVE it) . Thanks for sharing
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hmm..Vic..I didn't know you're sooooooooooooo good at love poems.
Wish you happy days my lovely little friend.
Shahrzad
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Elegantly romantic! Such a sweet poem dedicated to your heart's possessor! I am quite positive that she loves this poem more than I shall ever do. Because of your sincerity and purity to love, you have made a wondrous masterpiece through your muse of love. Great rythm by the way.
Riche
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oooooo so much detail and soft words, makes me almost go in a dream lol lovely write hun! and
AND nice job! urs truly ki
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lovely
This was lovely vic. You are sweet smart and talented. You will be a gift one day for some lucky girl! -
awww my sweet awesome friend Vic!!! that was a beautiful poem! very deep and meaningful! i loved it and i'm sure the person you wrote it for would have loved it as well.... i hope that you did give it to her! you are a very talented poet! keep it up my friend!
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hey vic! This poem is beautiful, the words are so descriptive, your phrases are amazing! I'm kinda ashamed of my stuff now, ur a talented writer! Write on! ~Passionate Singe~
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Just passing through your works and needed a pick-me-up before I go to bed. Thank you once again for loving me in such a wonderful way. This piece touched me like nothing ever has before. Your words flowed so gently like a tender leaf floating tenderly along on the breeze. You have touched my life in wonderful ways and I am thankful that it will never be the same... it will only be better from here!
Lily -
lovely
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PERFECT 10!!!
Hi again vic...wow, you're powers are really out of this world!
I mean...your verses...I dunno how you came to think of all of them and how you put them out in words.This one's got a perfect title, for its really really perfect.
You inspire me a lot, really. thanks!
Oh, and keep it up ok!
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Excellent Writing
There is another beautiful poet on this site that is very much like you in sentiments his name is PUPPYDOG. If you don't know him. Go read some of his poems. You will see what I mean.
This is stunning.
Hugs
Mumma Jan -
So so so beautiful! I love the rhyming and flow that went flawlessly. It is a lovely read.
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Hi a good write keep it up!
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Wonderful Poem
Hi Vic ! A good write, and somewhere notoroius feel. I liked it. keep writing.. Take Care.. Anu -
hey eternalpoet i like this poem(pure perfection) is really nice well go to go bye Applaud this work
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AWESOME
UMMM LETS JUST SAY WOW... THIS IS A REALLY DEEP POEM AND I THINK YOU SHOULD ALWAYS KEEP WRITNG... I FELT EVERY WORD -
nice poem, very awesomeness! keep it up, ur good!
urs truly, cheese master
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Nooo... -Fae to -Vic HE HE HE
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oo.. thanks.. ididnt know that.. tee hee .. now i know.. i will make sure i will follow the wonky fae
*hugs and kisses*
- vic to -Fae
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Aww this is beautiful Vic! What a lonely tribute to your friend. She is sweet ne c'est pas? [just mean isn't that so]
You said you had won a trophy for this but it looks like you deleted it from the contest. When you do that your trophies wont connect to the poems that win. In the future, when a contest is over [if you didnt win a trophy in it] go to EDIT / CHANGE THIS INTO A REGULAR POEM. It will still keep the entry in the contest that way and you will get more reads.
In this case, you have to keep it as a contest poem for the trophy to be connected to it. Any questions lemme know it took me forever to get that.
This is worthy of such a great prize and I congratulate you my friend
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Hello Lovely Dearest , I apologize for being late to comment your poem
but im kinda grounded I sneaked on and trying to comment, ne ways this was wondeful!your diction was great you varied in words, your flow was consistant and marvelous, it has such a beautiful message you depicted her very well!!I miss and Love You very much! Ruth
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amazing! my friend,this is one of the best that I have seen in a long time, such dedication to a poem,undeniable love placed in this poem/caring keep the pen scrolling..Linda
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Beautiful. I love it.
Ah! for this you deserve no less than a 100 slabs of choco and a million hugs and kisses and above all else. heaps of love from your Mummas all four of us.
I think it a delightful poem that anyone would find wonderful.
You are such a gentle loving soul Vic. Your page is great nothing wrong with it. Keep it just the way it is. XXXOOOXXX -
Another brilliant write by you. I'd like to use this one for my next book, if that's ok son? I'm requiring another 4 from you, my boy deserves to be read by many I love you son, always - damn soppy lady dog of a mumma
Good luck in the contest and I'll lend you some polish to clean your trophies. Thanks for sharing. Mums
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This is an awesome poem and I'm sure Bella Kalishi appreciates it. I loved how you rhymed and how it doesn't sound force. Keep on writing! Good Luck in the contest!
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OH...my Velicate Vella Vily,
I'm so sorry, I just got so excited earlier to see that you wrote such a loving piece for me that I was just swept off my feet! I promise, from this day forward, for better for worse, in sickness in health, for richer for poorer, you shall forevermore be known as..................... Velicate Vella Vily Vic. ♥ :
Yours always and forever or until AP Refuses to load upon my lovely computer screen... Bella aka Delicate Lily ~* -
you got soo excited that you named me all wrong.. grrrrr my name is strictly Velicate Vella Vily Vic when it comes to US ... ( jk )
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Stunning and Beautiful
My Precious and loving Vic. This is beyond words almost as the beauty of your work flows to the deepest part of me and has touched me in places that have needed healing and soothing this day. This is such a stunning piece with amazing images that float softly on the mind and in the heart. Thank you, so very much my beautiful and loving Vic, for being such a special part of my birthday. I love you, with all my heart and so much more. Thank you, for being such a wonderful...YOU!
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talented!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Brillant Vic, I loved it. You have used such lovely words for this piece of writing. I loved the way it all sounded as I read it, just like a song, the ryme all were very good.
Fab write Vic.
Mary
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Pure Perfection by enternal's poem throws us glance of the nature in a different way, it reflect the poet has sources of light. Bravo! poet.
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Beautiful!!! My new friend Vic, this is a beautiful poem, and I'm sure that Bella will love it...
The images put in my mind..lovely! She is portrayed so well...an image of grace, beauty, strength and wisdom...
The language is lovely...eloquent...flowing nicely, and a real pleasure to read...
Very nice work...keep writing!
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You put my work to shame! This rawks!!
Its luvly, and i love anythign about the moon so u won me over the eclipse line. I lvoe really detailed poems and metaphors and all stuff like that so awesome. This in a contest? **can't b bothered to scroll up** Well i hope you win if it is! If not i shall personally harass whoever it is who stopped ur shiny trophy marathon! lol. And if its not then i shall look like a fool, and shall retreat to my apple tree which does not defy gravity
HUGS AND CHOC FLAVORED KISSES
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This is a very beautiful write Vic. A sweet, smooth write with beautiful images made by your own, very caring ways and words. Fabulous write s and best wishes... ~genie~
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Hey are you crazy??What is the doubt for?I am so sure bella will love this write..It is so sweet..the rhyming and everything just fitted in perfectly..Good luck in the contest..Hope you add more trophies to your kitty and keep in touch!
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nice flow
Nice flowing style and a very poignant poem. A joy to read.
Only one thing, I was not sure of the meaning of this line:
"And when I see her kiss away every pry" - the use of the word "pry" puzzled me somewhat.
Whatever, the poem was a delight and I so enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing.
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this is a beutiful write vic!!! Im sure Bella would enjoy this wonderful heartfelt write... you have a talent for these types of writes!!! great work!
Nikki
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it's a BEAUTIFUL poem! really liked the very first line. Nice rhyming, and aliterations, extremely vivid use of words.
Keep well!
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